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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / 2nd excerpt of Guerrillas in the Midst
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Chapter Four Kevin was stoic as he made his way down Broad Street. His conversation with Robert was still ringing in his head, accompanied by thoughts on life, love, and the American way. He couldn’t understand how a country with as much resources as the U.S. has could leave a man homeless to die slowly in the streets he once fought to protect—a man who would’ve more than likely lost his life if it were not for losing his mind. It was a strange irony, no doubt—one that prompted Kevin to consi...
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Criticism / What if?
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I remember sitting, and watching the verdict on the OJ Simpson trial many years ago. I also remember the varied reactions of all the viewers and people, black and white, around the country who were elated and disgusted at the same time. As I reflect back on those events, and the latest OJ debacle...I can't help but wonder...what if he didn't do it? How many mainstream Americans would be prepared to step up and apologize for the horrid mistreatment of this man? How many would actually re-evalu...
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Poetry / Love & Respect
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This is a story about Love and Respect And how their relationship ended, ruined by Regret In the beginning, Love had always followed her heart Which was how she won and maintained Respect from the start It began so glorious their devotion was so true For Love only wanted Respect, and he, her too The beauty of Love was truly awesome to behold And attracted many suitors, the young and the old Respect never worried, nor bothered to fret For he thought that Love wasn’t so easy to get Then came Lu...
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Poetry / Ignorance
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Her journey had been long, Enlightenment revealed many things; However, none were more memorable than her encounter with one being. Ignorance was his name, and though he appeared to be kind, An innate void seemed to inhabit his mind. Since his behavior was mostly raucous, and other times calm, No one knew what to make of his decidedly nervous qualm. Because of his circumstance, Ignorance dwelled alone, And Danger was the only guest who visited his home. When exposed to Enlightenment, Ignoran...
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Short Story / Pennies in the Dirt
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The sun had begun to set on the now empty park Everyone had gone home except a man pushing a cart He, being homeless, had nowhere to go And wandered about aimlessly, with his head hung low. He’d spent the bulk of his life wasting time And had once been sent to prison for committing a crime His was the fate of an under achiever, But he, despite circumstance, remained a non-believer. For even as a young man, he consistently aimed low Which was the reason for his failure though he didn’t know. ...
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it is always a pleasure to read something that resonates in one's mind. I definitely appreciated the sentiments in your writing. It all came across so real that I envisioned it in my mind's eye. I especially enjoyed when you wrote, "I awoke one morning and rolled over in the bed to find myself caught in a tug-of-war with the rest of . . . myself . . . part of me rolled while the rest of me lagged behind, something like a slow-motion movie of a taffy pull gone bad." Lately, I've been experienc...
Poetry / Beyond the Door
It's been a little while since I've been on this site...but, since I've been asked to come out of retirement I figured that it would have to be for something that I felt was worth it, and this, my friend, definitely was! At first I thought that it was just another cliche driven piece, but as I read further I became enveloped in its rapture. I don't think that I am much of an authority on poetry, but I do know what is considered good, and this is it. Keep up the good work, and thanks for reque...
Praises! (don't worry, that will be the one and only exclamation point in my commentary. I have to say that your instruction was most helpful...I am an aspiring writer who has self published two of my own works, and have yet to discover if they will/have passed muster; however, the advice you offer is extremely helpful. In fact, invaluable. I am guilty of a few of the things you mentioined, and plan to rectify those mistakes. I wish that others on this site would take that same advice and use...
Haiku/Senryu / Awakening
Nicely put. I envisioned the scene just as you wrote it...perhaps the butterfly could have fluttered after tasting the morning dew. Just my two cents. papyrusandpen
Short Story / Untitled
Wow! As I read through this I couln't help but wonder if it was really about someone you know personally...maybe even yourself. You have a lot of passion, which is good for an aspiring author. What's next is how to channel that passion into something that is both enjoyable to read and substantive. The good thing is that you have a lot of life (God willing) ahead of you to hone your skills. Now, lets get down to the nitty gritty: First, you seem to have so much you wanna say, but you don't hav...
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