Interesting. Underestimate is one word, so you can pick up another. Is the child within wise or spoiled? How is s/he related to the creative life? You seem to assume your reader will know. This could just as easily be about psychology as creativity though.

You asked for honest critique without reference to rhyme or meaning, so here's what I see in that limited window. Your main problem is the consistent use of cliche. 'Don't fear', 'night has ended', 'tears won't flow', 'skies are clear'... and so on. You see what I mean I hope. These work fine in casual conversation, and can work to some degree in song lyrics, but not in serious poetry that you want published in a lit journal. There's really no wiggle room on that one. Good luck revising.

More top quality work. Short form is harder, and the 'prize' is greater. Your pear appears holy, as indeed it is. Your meaning is muted but clear and uplifting, a jazzman's trumpet. As usual, you excel in achieving unity and coherence. The last two lines are killer; taste/touch/sight and original/deep metaphor in nine words. A very tight economy indeed. Picks: All subjective I think. I know the whole depends on the hand, on what is and isn't within 'grasp', but S2 seems ordinary in its langua...

It's rather wordy and awkward. Some of the language is imprecise. If you're asleep, you're unconscious, so that part doesn't make sense. I think you could reword this with an eye towards economy of language and come up with something funnier.

I appreciate found poetry, and the idea of using spam subject lines is clever. This piece however does not cohere well, or not at all really. There is a randomness to this that leaves it devoid of meaning. Usually in found poetry, one chooses words and phrases and rearranges them to give depth of personal meaning. That could work for you with this. Otherwise it seems as if you've taken whole subject lines and stacked them on each other. You could do the same with fortune cookie messages, news...

Leaving aside the philosophical debate, this is a fairly clear expression of your viewpoint. A few picky points... You use 'man' in sentence two when current convention calls for 'person'. You could tighten that up. "No person is born knowing..." In the next sentence "These things must be..." then connect it to the next sentence, which is actually a fragment. "... learned through trials, pain and suffering. "Held onto ever inch of the way" doesn't make much sense in this context. Who holds on...

Usually poetry involves the use of verbs whether it evokes a moment or tells a story. This approach, one image after another with absolutely no action save what the reader invents, lacks the power of movement. There is no color, and there is almost nothing in the way of touch, sounds, tastes or smells. There is nothing vivid and little that's evocative. The last point is true unfortunately because many of the images are cliche. Verbs, deeply descriptive language and original metaphors would i...

Regarding your two goals, I rated you high for amusement as I think each is clever and humorous in its way. I can't rate it that highly as poetry, as there are several problems (the most prominent being that rhyme dictates meaning in several of your lines.) I could say more about those aspects, but I suspect your more interested in knowing if it amused so I don't want to waste your points.

Your picking up a feather and 'liberating' the ant is a moment is ripe for poetic treatment. That you choose to explore it from the perspective of the ant is creative and a fruitful path to pursue I think. Overall I see this as a poem on its way to somewhere high. Like the ant, you must carry it further before God raises it to Heaven. The imagery is appropriate and unified (bugs, sky, light, feather, etc...) It's all organic. It coheres fairly well, though in some ways its a bit out of focus....

As a tool to achieve your ends, I can see how it might work. Good job. However, as poetry, it falls quite short. It really is more the stuff of song lyrics as it is constructed almost entirely of cliche phrases. Every line except the one about hickies is as such. The hickies line doesn't work either, not because it's too vulgar for poetry, but because the phrasing is too informal and the tone immature. If you want to take this any further, my suggestion is to pursue it as a rap or some other ...