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AGE:
19
LOC: United States
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 10
LOC: United States
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 10
I am a fiction writer. I think that imagination is the greatest tool any one soul can use. I’ve notice that I don’t see the world the same way the masses see it. I think this gives me my own style of writing. Even though I write fiction most of the events that occur in my stories are usually have happen to me.
My big goal here is to get my womrk out into the world. Like Tupac, “I’m not going to be the person eho changes the world, but I ant to influence the one who will.”
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As the sun began to set on another day in Philadelphia a women with long black hair made her way to the roof of bookstore that sat near the slums. The setting sun cast a beautiful orange glow over the cement floor. Looking to move new bookshelf down into the store Razine Rose searched the roof top. To her left was the adjacent pawn shop that stood a story higher than the bookstore. Before her were four vents, spewing small grey clouds thanks to the cold air. Gripping her black vest she wished...
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High on the roof of a book store a lovely, dark skin woman looked amongst the half finished bookshelves and gave a sigh. Wearing a black vest over her white dress shirt, that hugged her slender little body, she placed her hands on her hips. Her white skirt stopped near her thighs, showing off her long lovely legs. With night black combat boots that matched her shoulder length hair she groaned. Taking her glasses off she rolled her marble brown eyes. With her Moroccan accent coming from her b...
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High on the roof of a book store a lovely, dark skin woman looked amongst the half finished bookshelves and gave a sigh. Donning a black vest over her white dress shirt she placed her hands on her hips. Her black jeans hugged her body and matched her combat boots. Taking her glasses off she rolled her marble brown eyes, “Jester said he would get to these shelves before he left for New York.” As she was about to bend down to try and put one together she noticed that the wind changed, “Makoto, ...
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“Class we have another new student,” Mr. Delavega said one early Monday morning when HE showed up. As soon as this scum bag came into the room he had every eye on him. His spiky jet black hair and chiseled good looks had every girl drooling on themselves. With his smooth sexy voice he shined those pearly whites and smiled. “Ello,” He said with his strong Spanish accent booming, “My name is Van; I’m from Seville, Spain.” Even Eliza couldn’t keep her eyes off Van. It was as if he had some kind...
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Two weeks. It has been two weeks since I made a deal with that sarcastic Grim Reaper, also known as Anubis. In that two weeks I’ve learned a lot. Such as I’m still in Crystal Bay and Eliza is going to my former high school. Another thing, I diddn't drop out I graduate from high school, that’s what I mean when I say former. It has been seventeen years since that night in the parking lot. The cops caught only the driver of the car. Oh and Jaheim, the looser who was in trouble with the gang tha...
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The story is good even with the lack of character development. The the connection between Skeath and Alora is presented well even with out Skeath's stammering to Sugo's words. Now, what to work on: My man you do well but you really didn't develope the setting real well. Always strive to use at least two sences when you talk about a room, how it smells, sounds, or the aura feels. Another thing It's fortunite I glanced at a D&D book otherwise I would have thought Sugo was either a beardless dwa...
Dude this was really nice. At first my attention wavered, but as I kept reading I was hooked. I even got upset at the end. You didn't put it in here, but it seams like the songs keep the story going. I hate musicals that stops the whole story just for a song and dance number, its almost as bad as Family Guy. Although it seams that your songs kept the story moving. The only thing I can suggest is that Scott seams a little fake. I mean he's been on the train I get that, but the question "How do...
Dog I'm not sure if you were aiming for a romantic comedy, but you nailed it. Markus is such a sarcastic muther that he comes off way cooler then should be allowed. Tess is a card in her own right. I love that she has set something on fire and that this is not her first time. Alright now for the criticism: I know she is about to go off the deep end and all, but what was the point behind her tailing Markus? I'm thinking it's something he did that reminded her that she's alone. Maybe he was on ...
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