Phantasmagoria's profile
AGE:
25
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 13
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 13
I’m a mathematician, software engineer and general left-brain type thinker. Unfortunately I’d rather be an expressive, artistic right-brain creator of beautiful things. Well I can hope and aspire and practise, practise, practise.
Despite using computers in every other aspect of my life I write on paper with a fountain pen from my worryingly large collection. (Eight in daily usage – each with a different coloured ink).
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I walk home tonight through a town painted blue. The sun has gone down. Not in a fiery, red blaze of glory, but nonchalantly, allowing the blue ink of the sky to darken and diffuse down onto the town. The streetlights try to blare out their orange and are quickly smothered and nullified by the blue. It’s only a short walk home from the station. I think it calls for some loud music. My mp3 player is navigated thus: ‘genre’ -> ‘rock’ -> ‘play all’ as I set off down the hill. The music acc...
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It has been brought to my attention that I touch things to much. So I gave this some thought and compiled a list of the day's touches. * There is a groove in my desk and when I think I run my index finger up and down it. I build up such a rhythm and pressure that I am surprised that the desk doesn't begin to sing with the resonance the way a wineglass would. * I bite my nails; the edges are rough. When I run my finger ends up and down the seatbelt the rough nails catch and crackle on the fibr...
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It's been out there, in our yard, for three days now. For three days now I've held myself back, but tomorrow, I will go outside and eat compost. I will make two cuts in the bag, meeting at a right angle. I will make these cuts with a filleting knife taken from the kitchen drawer. The cut flap will roll back to reveal compost. Rich, heady scented compost. Dirt is just dirty, soil has been adulterated and mud is unattractive in consistency. Compost is clean and pure. Decomposition, rotting, the...
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white flowers drift on the green soft words stem the blood flow avert my eyes from what I have seen he said no one has to know keep your pure innocent silence a veil to hide your immoral soul seething with young passionate violence wishing for someone to make you whole a life for a life, a kiss for a kiss this bitter kiss is sweet as death I can't believe you made me into this a rotted love is all I have left body and blood have gone to nothing don't tell, that I made my bed in your coffin
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I haven't read the first novel, though I think there's an excerpt on my review queue, so I'll check that out next. My comments about this piece can be split into three rough categories: character problems, clarity problems, and slight weakness of prose. First and most severely - problems of character. Amber is your title character, the heroine, yet the first two choices she makes are to hide. She's coming across as passive and a coward. You can't guarantee that someone browsing through this b...
Please immediately request a refund for this review. Urbis has a bug and I can't skip this from the top of my requested review list. I've tried getting in touch with them to have this bug fixed but it's been ages and no change. Hence I'm trying to see if posting a review will get rid of it. Nothing personal in the skip - I just know nothing about reviewing poetry. From an amateur perspective I like it, it sounds pretty good rhythm and pace-wise. You obviously know what you're doing as evidenc...
I don't so I won't if you don't mind. I don't jump through hoops. The reason I don't love Tess is that for the first ten minutes of the film she's a nobody. Just a pretty actress that Markus likes. She's not established as a likable or sympathetic character. She's just Ophelia and then in the second ten minutes she's just nutty and insecure. She's not coming through as the protagonist. Your title implies and your review notes say that this is a movie 'about a woman on the edge'. But it's not....
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