Phill's profile
AGE:
47
LOC: Scottsdale, AZ
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: March 31
LOC: Scottsdale, AZ
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: March 31
I have been an artist since I was pretty young. Mostly painting and drawing. I’ve written poems and short stories to fill my time when I could not paint, but now I find that poetry is my main artistic release. I always have to create something. I’m sure all artists are that way. Got to have a creative release. I am shareing my poems and wish to hear all of your comments.
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Nicely written. I would make some subtle changes though. "stones do not stop their being".I would change 'froze' to 'freeze'. I enjoyed this nice little poem. Thank you for sharing.
Wonerful imagry. I have only one suggestion, though. in the line "the sea is in bed" Maybe say 'the sea is the bed' or 'the sea, its the bed'. I really feel as if the sea is meant to be the bed and not going to bed itself. I hope that makes sence. Thank you for sharing.
A very interesting read. I really liked the imagry. I too feel like the inocent wisdom of a child is a perseptive force. Very well written. Thank you for sharing.
For a rough draft, this is well written. The only thing I can suggest is 'where no (one) will sit' I'm sure that is what you meant any way, and 'for (no) one to come' in the last line. Keep up the good writing. Thank you for sharing.
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