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Very nice. short yet gives us enough to develop it within our heads. liked how the first part was choppy sentences. Just one thought on those (totally opinion) maybe make the "I reached over. One new text message." two separate lines (following the rest of the section) and maybe edit out the "From" and just leave it "Gavin". Just a thought. Seems more poetic that way. I think it would give it more force.

Good read. Interesting and different. Curious about where it's going. Only one issue (and this is a personal issue, take it or leave it): through out the whole writing you explain everything. There's no room for my imagination. No room for me to work out what you are saying. In doing this you reveal your hand too quickly, not leaving the suspense. Instead of telling us who is and isn't a human (or werewolf), leave us guessing for a bit. You left us curious as to who Cavil's love was for a bit...