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AGE:
25
LOC: Rahway, NJ
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 10
LOC: Rahway, NJ
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 10
“As a writer, physical nakedness is far less intimidating than the nakedness we subject ourselves to through our pen; And I bleed through mine.*”
-juStiCe
Comments, critiques and inspirational new friends always welcome!
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Things I have come to realize. I will always be messy. From my bedroom to my thoughts. 99% of the time I’ll leave empty handed, I’ll give all I have brought. My back and feet will always hurt, but I’ll run and walk, just the same. And it’s pretty and all but no doubt I have a hick-ish name. Simplicity is my ode to fame but I’m quite complex. I’ll always make love without ever having sex. These are the things I’ve come to realize; better know them well. And I’ll never love you more than I’ve g...
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Things I have come to realize. I will always be messy. From my bedroom to my thoughts. 99% of the time I’ll leave empty handed, I’ll give all I have brought. My back and feet will always hurt, but I’ll run and walk, just the same. And it’s pretty and all but no doubt I have a hick-ish name. Simplicity is my ode to fame but I’m quite complex. I’ll always make love without ever having sex. These are the things I’ve come to realize; better know them well. And I’ll never love you more than I’ve g...
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[de·sire] 1. A wish or longing. 2. A request or petition. 3. The object of longing: My greatest desire is to go back home. 4. Sexual appetite; passion. Dear Love, I lay beside you and spite my best efforts, I cannot be close enough. I think to myself, “Be inside of me, if for just a moment, maybe then I’ll have Heaven at my fingertips and contentment in my soul.” Let our toes play, our bare legs intertwine, hands hold and lips find eachother’s. I put my head on your chest and my palm over you...
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The Story of Us Chapter- Like Fireflies* 12/17/05 You hardly realize the many things that you lose, when you selflessly love another person. And now comes the task of gathering the pieces of me* so that, on this Horror Show- I can close the curtain. I walk to the far right of his messy bedroom, and gently pick my Faith up off the floor. On his mirror, is a picture of us is frayed and torn. "Found it!" I yell as I take down my Priorities that had hung on the back of his door. I come across my ...
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Thy Binding Breath April 4th, 2003 Had it ever occured to you that the very breeze that kisses your cheeks, has enveloped the hate of war and carried weaponry through? When your soldier is in a distant place and so in need of a familiar face... Console you heart and your mind, this keep, to help you pass the time.. As you carry on, weep- and even when you sleep, let relief into your lungs, submission into your soul- creep. In knowing that which pushes your heart to once again and again, beat,...
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Hey, this reminds me somewhat of myself when I sit and become the "oh, so serious writer" critiquing, revising, pondering person tearing at a piece of paper. I think is conveys beautifully, a writer, a Goddess, in herself, looking as if outside herself, on herself, admiring. I really, really like this peice.
"A place of deep dark red, of salted memory stained by time." "stained by time" perfect. "Perhaps with a pension and heath insurance" -health* simple surface error. no big deal. "Not to name it! Not to write it down. For if you call attention to it, it changes." -this line gave me chills. beautifully executed. the countdown towards the end made my heart beat faster. this poem invokes monumental amounts of emotion. just as poetry should. "bottom line dance" i could not have fathomed a better n...
Your words envoke "newness" and "light" and create a picturesque vision in my minds eyes. A soft rhyme scheme, keeping a rhythm without making it dull and trite. "Thoughts that have less meaning, broken spirit amoung the breaking light." I absolutely adore the above quoted line. I have no complaints here except maybe you meant "among" instead of "amoung" in my favorite line up there? HAHA. Anyways. surface errors are much less important to me than the excellence you have expressed. Definatley...
Beautifully executed lines. Tender rhyme scheme. And then there was no more to read! I'd love to see you add much more to this. I can see this being maybe one and a half stanzas out of a 4-5 stanza song... "count each star with a kiss, wish on the prettiest one." -By far my favorite line. Gimme more, more, more!
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