this is great, i knew a man who had a gambling problem(well more like a losing problem).he would lose every bet but it was addicting to him,his wife divorced him and his children kicked him out of their lives. i love the way you described a homeless man's shame, and the way we all, yes all of us, stare at them.

seems more like a rant but enjoyable nonetheless. them myspace errors got me twice, it doesnt stop me from wasting hours though. PS3 blows, for now,their launch games suck, the only deal you get out of that is saving 400 dollars when buying it instead of a bluray player(that currently cost 1grand) hey dude if you want a volunteer for the running thing im in!

oh man, i remember standing up to a wave at the beach, i lost my courage that day as well as my nuts. nice haiku

hey this is great work, i was really captured by the characters,even the dog had personality.i dont think it needs any removal or addition to the text, it's perfect how it is. Any reader will obviously complain about the little information of races and the war and slavery but it is enough and answers will be revealed in the chapters that continue. Again, i was hooked and pleased with how the slave farmhand carefully wished with both a good heart and proper manners. Really great and i can not ...

this reads really depressing, i got kinda tired halfway, im sure i'll get it if i push on but its like being forced to eat peas.

aside from the spelling errors i think this is alright, the imagery is good, and it is depressing, u got that down.

history is not the most boring class of the day!!! i actually enjoy it....i don't think this belongs in childrens or young adult...keep it "short story" for a 13yr old writing this is good...i dont even remember wat i've written at that age.

this is perfect, great ending, while you or actually megan was narrating her story i felt as if i was the dude. it was awesome. this girl is evil and i cant wait to read more of her and her games. It wasn't boring in the beginning and it never fell from the excitement you began it with.

this is great though, im really bad at poetry and im jealous by how u can tell the story and rhyme... something im horrible at!

forgive me im bad at poetry, but i dun understand what is being told...maybe its about candy...i think im wrong...yeah im wrong.