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AGE:
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LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 20
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 20
I work better with a pencil in my hand drawing out my frustrations and yet I can’t help but nurture the creativity that has budded inside of me. I’ve been encouraged to draw because I’m stronger in the craft, but I write, as well, when drawing can’t convey my feelings. I entertain thoughts that some of the things I write are profound, but I couldn’t be entirely sure.
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Not knowing they would be her last moments alive, she crept blindly through the darkness. She felt the walls, so familiar, until she made it into the bathroom. Though it never helped, she flipped the switch. She could feel the light was on as her hand fumbled around for the sink knobs. She turned the hot and cold knobs simultaneously and ran a hand under the water. Her hands scraped something in the sink. She winced. Almost as if it was automatic, her hand reached for the medicine cabinet. H...
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Be honest with yourself--it's been month five And you're acting as if she's the main reason you're alive-- Almost as if she's your every breath despite the fact That she doesn't call, hardly communicates, and that's Driving you crazy, isn't it? She won't answer the texts You send her. You tell her you're getting her something and then All of a sudden it's as if she was interested in you again, when Really she only seems to want what you have burning holes In your pockets. To fall into that is...
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I wanted to stay, but the new life compelled Me to journey forward. I obeyed and propelled Onward to meet new people, greet new faces (Attractive or not); I traveled to unique places And left a mark, etched my trail for future followers To tread. It's a treacherous path--not for wanderers. This journey's only for the discerning; Those who live their lives filled with yearning For better; who know they have higher Purposes in life and strive to attain those higher Purposes. The past strengthen...
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There is, essentially, no such thing as being friends after a breakup. Not long after it has ended, she won't call so often. You call her and she doesn't want to talk. She stops saying "I love you" even though she told you she would never stop loving you. And when you don't hear those three words, you begin to doubt her love for you. When you visit she doesn't touch you, she hardly talks to you; you're not even there in her mind. You fool--she promises to call you later and you believe her. Y...
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Don't leave me out here--let me in So that I can finally let our friendship begin Because we're at a standstill before we even started And it won't be long before we're physically parted. Close your eyes and imagine my presence Beside you, embracing you; an inviting essence That compels you--it brings us closer together And yet I can't possibly fool myself as to whether or not you're even interested in me, though I don't think you are because you seem to go Away from me; you're trying to keep...
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Very raw. Didn't ruffle my feathers, but it reminds me of a relative of mine. This line doesn't make sense to me: "But what you got is grows like weeds." Do you mean to write "it" instead of "is"? Eye opening.
It was joy reading this. I wouldn't change any of it--except the very last word, which should be "badly."
Wow, that was wonderfully written. Though I think there should be a period at the end of the first stanza. I tend to get anal about using enjambment, so when you don't use punctuation to steer me, I automatically run into the next sentence assuming it's being used. My apologies for your loss. Your words truly captured love for another. I admire that greatly because it is sometimes difficult for a person to write down expressed feelings, especially concerning love.
I really like this sentence: "She just closed her eyes and tried to sink back into the darkness behind her eyelids." You misspelled "from." You've written this wonderfully. You've captured the feelings involved in depression better than I've known anyone to do. I see no errors except for the one I mentioned earlier. You have extraordinary talent.
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