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LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 21
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 21
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Well met!
Queen of Cups…
I tend to read quite a bit and my writing reflects what I have read. Which is how I end up with poetry, prose and Goddess knows what else.
I am not quite sure how this place works but it looks like a site that will allow me to gain insight and hopefully constructive critism as well as reading other works and expanding my literary knowledge.
Nice to meet you and I look forward to hearing from you.
Q.o.C.
And because I was so nicely asked…
QUEEN OF CUPS
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It's interesting - I like the two seperate endings... Some small grammar issues... After Discretely, - I think a period would work, since the next line starts with a cap letter...same line - needs a period. Also, was there a footnote? There is an asterisk after the unseen disease but no explaination. Good job
I really liked this... having studied a lot of ancient Roman battles, this is well done... Oddly, the only thing that stuck out and stopped me from reading for a second was the line, "The steel that encased me sucked in the cold like a starved child." For some reason, the metaphor or allusion didn't seem to fit. I understand how a cold starving child would feel - but it made me think about it and the flow was gone. Otherwise, very, very good!!
Wow, that was impressive. I really liked the way you worked in the mythology stories within your own story. I didn't see anything grammatically incorrect but the one thing that stuck out - and it may well be your intention - is the copious use of description. There were several times I had to stop and re-read a line because of the description given to the topic. The story is aiming to be very Homer-esque but right now, it needs a little toning down, just my opinion though... it is a very good...
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