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LAST LOGIN: November 12
LAST LOGIN: November 12
Hey, I’m Mark. I used to write, and even pretend to sometimes still. I don’t write for you, I don’t write for me. I just write. :)
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I'd rather fucking dance upon fiery ash than lie before you, helpless and willing. Need paves the way to control, control to loyalty undeserved. Fuck that and fuck this too. Fucking exist as a decrepit nothing rather than a fucking, `apt` possession.
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Time....tongue, erotic then some; clash or lash or slash or thrash cracks its burn through ya. Entertain, perhaps as a greater trial with a lesser meaning; your smile is self- defeating. If you'll breathe life, might as well sing, for echoes are but omitted, overlooked noise. So why come at you, why try to create any type of stimulation in your petty, forgetting mind?
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Rough, yet steady slow...smooth, forever ready. So many light flashes, weak glances, timed smiles, versed desperation. Efforts slashed by distance or exhaustion. An unfinished symphony... forever ready.
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I'll title this poem, I'll title this life, But what's it matter in this chilling night. Days and dreams sailing alone sailing in sweet sunbeams and soft company. Nowhere to go, no need to hide, life's a charade empty alive. Reaching for stars preaching for purpose what can you make of this facade? Seasons change breeders breed breeders bleed the world uncaringly whirls again. Then. I'll two-tap with these demons, toe-to-toe tic-tac and a little show. Have what I'll give, yearn what I won't s...
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It takes some confidence, follow- through to breed poetry. Can't stumble your way through life, words. I'm laying in our bed without you baby. Sometimes, you have to know everything, so you can hold a candle for them to extinguish, follow. Sending off our prayers without you baby. You have to feel the beauty in all things, instances, and splash it like paint onto your canvas, heart. Pressing our goodnight lips to ice without you baby. You have to maintain a calm, withdrawn composure to serve ...
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:) Definitely a sexy poem...I really liked some of the lines, like, "Your hands gliding slowly over my body,/Like a sculptor working his masterpiece," and, "Come now…taste me,drink me like wine." Those sound especially sexy, especially classy even. There were a few lines though that I thought were a lot less creative, a little overused in the world of writing, such as, "I arch my back,moaning ever so softly," and, "Our bodies intertwine." You can find those lines in a lot of poetry, and the i...
Hm, I definitely definitely liked the poem, and some of the situations and comparisons you made (especially his conversation style to bar room karaoke.) I liked the voice of the poem as well, it felt as if it was all coming across as a letter, which was definitely the right voice for this poem. The ending, the last stanza, I wasn't too big a fan of. She seemed to be ready to dive into the relationship and the relation between it and their writing, when she decides its cliche and stereotype. I...
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I found it was a little hard to follow, but I sort of liked it like that. I definitely like the whole vibe of the poem...it's dark and erotic, almost hazy, and through the fog your just almost see this woman, the way I think you wanted us to see her. I especially liked your word choices with, `the conversation of kisses,` and, 'my laughing girl.' Pretty good poem, I enjoyed it. 7.8. :)
I liked the construction of the poem quite a bit. Each stanza stuck to what it was talking about, and it was pretty easy to follow. I liked the clash throughout the poem, the, "evil's fire and heaven's breath," if you will. Storms and fires versus calm and lessons. The idea of structure without boundaries("along a path yet free to change another step along the way.") The voice definitely seemed a little withdrawn, or too calm, though. I felt that if you combined the voice of this poem with a ...
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