RandomHero's profile
AGE:
27
LOC: United States
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: May 05
LOC: United States
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: May 05
My name is Jacarlo Hairston I am trying to write the great american novel in me and appreciate any feedback to can help my book and my stories better
Items
Version 1
2 Reviews
0 Comments
I thought I knew what vacant was until now. Reflection and the thought of sobriety are forcing me to figure it out. I was supposed to be writing the next great American novel but it was coming too hard for someone who always thought that this was his birthright and destiny. I can’t even blame it on the demons and distractions anymore because no matter what they’ll keep calling me. And I still fucking sit here with nothing to show for the thing I want to do the most another dead soul disappoi...
Version 1
6 Reviews
0 Comments
Try waking up and enjoying the life you’ve chosen. –Bill Hicks If this is freedom, I’m fucked. –Joey Ramone I wake up this morning and came to the conclusion that maybe, just maybe this is all a lie. The future is never going to come and the past never goes away. All I got is this moment. Why wait for something to happen in this boring ass city, in this fucked up state, in this bullshit country, in this suck ass world. I’m sorry reader it’s just I’m tired. I’m tired of the life I lead, I’m fe...
Version 1
51 Reviews
1 Comment
Elusive nature of the truth I let him cut me off again and air out his obvious problem with my book. This has been going on everyday for a week with every interview. Reporters keep grilling me and throwing shots and going on and on about a fiction book. Nothing that stands for any truth, just a made up story. “So how do you feel about the whole controversy?” Roger for the Christen Review asks “I don’t think it’s a big deal. I mean….” “Well a host of organizations. Religious, feminist, family ...
Version 1
82 Reviews
2 Comments
Grime Core (Angel and an Addict) "The only difference between martyrdom and suicide is press coverage." -Chuck Palahniuk It’s like you wake up one day and you’re in a Bret Ellis novel. And no one knows it’s like your trying to write for the blind and you’re the main one not seeing but I smoked a lot of weed for my cataracts you feel me. The karma cops caught up to me and now I’m hooked up to tubes and monitors and this is what I get for trying to be a random hero is all that’s on my mind. My ...
[ View all items ]
Reviews
This is a very complex look at the writing pattern of a writer very connected with the people living the AAmerican Dream on a regular babsis instead of a sheltered view like so many today. Th fact that you picked up on what he was putting down makes all the information worth reading through because you and he have a point.
the first to lines are perfect. And asking someone in a mental fog if they are the man they hoped to be cuts very deep. Even if I didn't get where you where coming from I would like the lyrics because they make me understand.
Not only could I hear the song in my head the lyrics are very unique and stand out to someone who has been in the sitution that the song tells. That is the best about the song it tells a story instead of an perspective,
It just seems that the character rings a little false. Someone thinking about killing themself would not have that much of a eye for detail because he or she is selfish and only worried about himself. That's how I feel this would be better, to get the character to act like a person who is in the situation of wanting to kill themself and not someone just having a bad day.
[ View all reviews ]
Favorites
People










