RemyEvans's profile
AGE:
24
LOC: Grove City, MN
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 26
LOC: Grove City, MN
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 26
Hello. My real name’s Evan. I’m 23 with a BA in Psychology, but I want to go back to college for music. Ozzy Osbourne is my favorite artist at the moment, “House” has just eclipsed “Metalocalypse” as my favorite TV show, and I’m left-center politically. My zodiac says I’m a Virgoan Ox, and I possess all of those traits. Overall, my life goal is to be a high school music teacher, finding one school in a small town and becoming a relic there.
Also, if you’re going to read “Sweetbreads”—START ON CHAPTER ONE. It may be buried in the archive, but it’s there.
Message me if there’s anything else you wanna know.
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You see it. You want it. You have no idea why. So stupid, So tragic, It will never, ever die. It's clouding all your thoughts: Even when you sleep, You can find no refuge. Your mind decides to keep Going, going, going… It’s not gonna happen. It’s a girl. It’s a guy. It’s a rare, exotic drug. It’s a car. It’s some art. Do you really give a fuck? It's taking up your time, And it borders on the morbid. But it’s not your fault, you k...
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You see it. You want it. You have no idea why. It’s so stupid. It’s so tragic; It is never gonna die. It is clouding all your thoughts: Even when you sleep, You can find no refuge. Your mind decides to keep Going, going, going… It’s not gonna happen. It’s a girl. It’s a guy. It’s a rare, exotic drug. It’s a car. It’s a painting. Do you really give a fuck? It's taking up your time, And it borders on the morbid. But it’...
Version 5
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…and nobody finds the one but keep looking crawling in and out of beds. flesh covers the bone and the flesh searches for more than flesh. --Charles Bukowski, “Alone with Everybody” Finished with my woman ‘cause she couldn’t help me with my mind… People think I’m insane because I am frowning all the time. Sobriety has greatly improved the pitch of Ozzy Osbou...
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[Verse One] Pillared buildings Washed in white Display wisdom, Good, and rights. Meanwhile, in the streets, Rust and filth arise. Green's a foreign color In the children's eyes. [Chorus] This is the end of an empire, And it's coming fast. This is the end of a short run; The glory days have passed. [Verse Two] Black-robed figures Patrol rooftops, Leaders sheltered Behind caltrops. We're advised not to fear, But it's all the seers sell. If we don't heed their guidance, We’re waited for in...
Version 5
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You see it And you want it, With no idea why. It’s so stupid. It’s so tragic; It’s never gonna die. It proceeds in clouding up your thoughts: Even when you sleep, You can find no refuge. Your mind decides to keep Going, going, going… It’s not gonna happen. It’s a girl. It’s a guy. It’s a rare, exotic drug. It’s a car. It’s a painting. Do you really give a fuck? Now it takes up all your time, And it borders on the morb...
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I wonder if this might be better told in poem form. I have no idea who you are, so if you're not a poet or poetically inclined, I apologize. A lot of your imagery would work better separated and staggered, and the entire subject of adoration and this girl's hesitation to accept it and apply it to herself would seem to fit that form better. "Porcelain face", "frown etches...", etc. They all seem like very poetic descriptions. That may also dilute one problem I had with this: you get a bit word...
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You have a very nice chorus here, with varying degrees of quality verses. Your first two could be polished a little. A removal of a syllable, perhaps. "Saving their pennies, nickels, and dimes" is too long, and disrupts the rhythm. Same with "our lives will be changing". Just throws off the rhythm, which is so important to have in lyrics. I'm not sure how "Politicians work..." and so forth is supposed to sound. If it's the next verse, then it should be structured more like the first. Your thi...
Another complete winner from you. You sure harness your anger well; I have to say that I am surprised you can release so much. Your first lines are such a precise, succinct way of stating the reason for, I imagine, so many suicides. I can't begin to imagine how many people have at least felt that way, and how many have acted upon it. Since you obviously haven't done it to yourself, I don't know how you found a way to feel it, but there it is. The break after the fourth line into the next stan...
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