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AGE: 48
LOC: Haines City, FL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 20

Writer, former journalist, specialties include Middle East, Music, former daily newspaper reporter, music magazines, feature writer – but my heart has always been in fiction writing.
Did the daily newspaper thing – for years… I also wrote for several music magazines, so if anyone has lyrics (or poetry) I am happy to have a look.
The novel I’m currently working on is based (loosely) on some of the people and situations I encountered in Beirut, and in West Bank/Gaza. Thanks for having a look!

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Novel Treatments / The Demon Lover Chapter 25
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Chapter 25      Kryptonite. Karim felt Angel’s sudden retreat against him when they entered the room where lunch with the Terror Lord had been set up. It already felt instinctive—like second-nature—to pull her protectively close.      “Shhh, Its okay, baby…” he whispered in her ear. She probably didn’t know it, but nobody was going to be stupid enough to fuck with him right now. That included what belonged to ...
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Novel Treatments / The Demon Lover Chapter 25 Pt 1
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Chapter 25 Pt 1      Kryptonite. Karim felt Angel’s sudden retreat against him when they entered the room where lunch with the Terror Lord had been set up. It already felt instinctive—like second-nature—to pull her protectively close.      “Shhh, Its okay, baby…” he whispered in her ear. She probably didn’t know it, but nobody was going to be stupid enough to fuck with him right now. That included what belonge...
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Novel Treatments / The Demon Lover Ch 23 pt 2 & ch 24 (complete)
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     Yes, the moment you die screaming. You will die, die, die mutherfucker.      Karim’s arm with the gun snaked around Angel’s waist and tightened. She squirmed, then stiffened as Karim drew her hair back and pressed his lips against her neck. It wasn’t so much about continuing with the freak-show as it was to hide the El Thar gleam in his own eyes, but Angel couldn‘t know that.      So the slimy fucker was...
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Action Adventure / The Demon Lover Chapter 3
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Chapter 3     It took Angel another few seconds to realize that the younger man, now minus the jean jacket, had appeared again out of nowhere. He also stood in front near the door, gold earring catching the light and swinging with his dark, shaggy curls. He leveled what appeared to be a compact sub-machine gun like the ones she’d seen in movies at the row of seats opposite hers.      “Everybody down. Down!” he shouted. Heads went down all ...
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Action Adventure / The Demon Lover Chapter 2
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Chapter 2       She had to be the one.       He’d checked out all the Aero-Trans gates, and no other woman came even close to matching with the blonde in the news clipping.       Still, he vacillated. He knew this type of American woman. The beauty queens, socialites—the daddy’s girl heiresses—had come to him in a steady stream in Washington. They liked to be seen with mysterious foreign men. It...
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Poetry / A Mogul Debates Her Maid
by Anonymous
Oh thank goodness I can gush if I want to and not be considered a "worthy" review! I'm not a poet, but I do love (good) poetry. I read this because I love the story it tells. I'm currently writing about the Middle East, so I love also the near-east slant. I'm just going to critique it like I would a story (because I'm not so qualified with the verse and rhyme, etc). It had good rhythm to my ears. I loved the vivid imagery and characterization. Anakarli's character is very well painted in this...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Chapter 7 - Raven Rising
by Megan_Solari
Oh! I really like the opening sentences! The deep darkness all the way to "his true eyes" just rocked for me. I absolutely love the way you decribed his type of vision too, not like a rat, etc. Awesome opening! One of your best! I like the content of this sentence but found the wording just a little awkward: It all added up to (make) a rather large gap in his worldly education. Maybe just get rid of the make? Or it could be just me? I like the way you give us just a little info on Zephyr's fe...
Humor/Satire / Pardon my Overalls
by D_W_Pederson
You have great writing style, and I saw very little to quibble with. The writing is well-done. Excellent characterization with Willard and Herbert. Great sense of place with the setting. It has a very overt humor (names of jobs, etc), but I sense an underlying irony here. I'm never in love with the double punctuation, but could be just me: Three or four weeks!? (This is a style thing, so take with a grain of salt) I really like this line, and lines that are similar: Uttersqeezers were happily...
Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / The Real - Chapter Thirteen: Forging on ahead
by Lillie_M
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Short Story / Betty
by jalubcarrey
You've revamped this! The opening and second paragraph seem different, but can't compare to the original right now. However, I very much like it. Talking about the day she was born definitely shows his feelings for his little sister and lets us know right away he is much older than her--at least old enough to remember foldly the day she was born. I do very much like the whole shadows thing in the second paragraph too. I was just wondering--is there a reason why he would begin his search in th...
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