This one made me laugh out loud--a very good sign. I would be interested, however, in what a native Japanese speaker says about your Haiku. I do not understand the rhythm and the shades of meaning in the Japanese.

You have hit upon an interesting idea: political correctness extended to a logical conclusion and "rights" extended to the non-living. The piece also succeeded in evoking a smile from this reader. However, it needs to be edited for caps and sentence structure. If you wish you can create a story of greater depth. What are the issues of a man using a machine instead of a wife? Is a "wife" merely a tool? Is the fight against all types of discrimination never-ending?

I enjoyed your choice of words to define. "Gunk" and "Humphrey" cannot be beat. However, I was hoping that the definitions would have something to do with the word's etiology, sound, or original meaning.

I liked the technique of reflection: than us, like us, and of us. I did not understand much of the imagery. For example, what is a negative tree? What is a harmonica wish? The imagery I could understand (I assume), such as melting moonlight, was effective.

The surprise ending is well done. The lack of punctuation gives the piece a breathless effect at the cost of readability. Perhaps you may wish to compromise and add a few periods. You'll still maintain the urgency and fast pace of the piece.

The description of the self-loathing is well-done. I would like to see what behaviors had set the writer in this pattern and who's lives had been ruined. I can identify more with the subject (the writer) if the character is more human--has a reason for the weaknesses on display.

The description of adolescent love--the intensity and short duration is expressed well. Perhaps you can add how you changed while pining for him and whether that change doomed the relationship.

I enjoyed the imagery. I can see the flower of the old plant opening. Perhaps "relax" or "straighten" would be better than uncurl, avoiding the use of two uns in the poem.

The story engages the reader and has the quality of a good horror story--not knowing what is going to happen next. There needs to be more connection between the pieces. What does the operation have to do with the Kafka-like demolition operator, and what does that have to do with the colony's government?