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AGE: 14
LOC: Highland, MI
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 21

As long as ive known how to write ve written anything that has come to my mind.
So far on here, i have only several parts of one story.
But locked in my breifcase are hundreds of pages unread by anyone but me.
Should i post some of them?
Should i let the world in on the ideas inside my mind?
I might.
Because Im so creative.
[Sounds narcassistic,but oh well.]
And the ideas themselves are good, but the way i wrote it… needs improvement.
Maye sometime you guys can help me fix some things.
Yeah?

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Poetry / Your Girl
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-musicstarts-Soft lips, small hips weighs down to 95 hips swing from side to side i can see it, mister, in you eyes weve got the one for you shes got -bangbangbang- soft lips, small hips dirty blond, magic wand soft hands, no demands 5th of Jack,shes out in back wearin only a black thong shes got some weed and a bong big tits, pro hits likes to tease, can always please weighs down to 95 hips swing from side to side i can see it, mister, in your eyes weve got the one for you shes got -bangba...
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Short Story / Convo in the Snow
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As she walked through the snow, her scarf riding on the breezes behind her, she shivered. She felt another presence and she turned her head.   He jumped out of his window in only jeans and followed her,barefooted. He hadn't seen her in so long, he was mesmorized by her beauty and grace.   Her heart filled with guilt and anger,until betrayal swallowed them up. She turned back around and reached for her headphones.   He grabbed at her arm and she spun around,tears streaming down ...
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Stoner agents-- part 5 [section one]
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Matt rolled his head and looked at Kane, his face glowing with the shame he felt, "..When?" Kane nodded his head lightly, reaching into his pocket and pulling out a joint. He began lighting it in the corner of his mouth as he spoke, "Maybe...half a year ago?" He grabbed the end of the joint and took two good puffs, then passed it over to Matt, who shamefully accepted it. With his lungs filled with smoke,Matt inquired,"How?" "She shot him clean in the back of...
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Stoner Agents? --- part four.
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"Two." The man said,and Matt heard a loud clicking noise from behind the door. "ALRIGHT. STOP." Matt raised his voice slightly, being careful not to wake Claire, as she was..well...quite a bitch in the morning. Matt slithered out of bed and crawled across the floor, too tired to actually stand, "This phone is corded,you know... I have to hang up.." Matt whispered into the phone, rubbing his forehead on the floor. "Just drop it. If you hang up, I will ki...
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Stoner Agents? --- part three
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Claire sat in her car across from the coffee shop where she had been questioning Lilly. She held her binoculars up to the window and peeked at Lilly, who had just begun to call someone on her cell phone. Claire lightly elbowed Matt, and he began tracking the call, " It looks like she's calling..." he squinted and moved his face closer to his laptop screen, "daniel." He sat upright and looked out Claire's window at Lilly. "Hey Matt, can we listen in?" Claire set h...
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Young Adult / Lavender Moon
I haven't actually read the first two chapters, but I like where this one is going. The tone for the main character is good, it seems like a person about fifteen is talking (So, if it's not, I suggest changing the tone, lol). But the phrase 'tiny bright little lights.' is too descriptive for stars. Remove one of the adjectives, it doesn't mater which one. xD Also, someone is one word. Just saying. ;) Another thing, at the end of page one, the internal question at the end (Who was she?) Is a b...
Short Story / The Fight
i thought at first maybe it was two tigers They both sounded so fierce So angry Sometimes the sentences were short; maybe a little choppy at times Like, i felt a few lines could be combined into one. But other than that I think its fine.
Poetry / A Million Miles
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Poetry / Mt. Washington
i dont read much poetry, and when i do i read things that are very very hard to understand But this piece After reading it, i feel like.. Like i want to read more. Like something small and insignificant may be missing from it. Im not sure. :/ But i did like it. A lot Id have to say, my favorite part of it had to be "Blackness illuminates the smoke, warmth The steam of evaporating moisture From your hair and dripping wool socks And words, floating upward, mixing together Catching one another, ...
Horror / Nikki the Wraith
Such descriptive talent. Lines like "My window was painted like a snowflake with foggy tendrils framing a crystalline surface." really bring the story to life. Sometimes there were shorter sentences,and it sounded alittle choppy, but i think it went perfectly in this story.