'Spilling out of the mind; but not like water' Wow~

Wow I like the ryhming, and the morbid theme.

Hmmm... it's a little too short for my liking. Perhaps you could elaborate a bit? Explain why you like tot hink you've lived it.

It was a little confusing for me, probably because I'm younger, but anyway. The olde time english style was very pretty, and also truly poetic. I'd say... 8/10? It was very nice reading overall.

Umm... I don't see what I'm supposed to be reading?

Lol This is the kind of thing I can go around chanting all day. It's cute and funny. Even though that's probably not what you were going for. I like it though

You did a very nice job of plot, you didn't rush and there was plenty of detail. I noticed maybe one or two spelling errors, but besides that your fine there. It was great overall and I will look forward to reading more.

This is a lovely piece. The rhyming was perfect, and flowed smoothly. I noticed you didn't capitalize the i's, but I didn't know whether or not it was one purpose. I was almost frustrated with the repitition of the words 'in the purest white', and then at the end you had said 'stained in dark red', which was a great way to end it.