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LOC: Germany
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LOC: Germany
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 20
I am actually a scientist, but dreaming up stories and writing them down has always been a hobby of mine. I am an antique book collector and also compose music and draw:
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Kevin wanted to commit suicide. He was “trapped in a theater, watching a movie that he did not want to see the end to.” Suicide was not actually his term for it. He was just planning to remove himself from the picture. I had known him for over two years; he lived alone in the cramped basement of an old dump, in an area infested with drugs and prostitutes. Roaches aside, Kevin kept an immaculate apartment; his frequent scrubbings had left his quarters permeated with the reek of dis...
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There comes a time, every once in a little while, sometimes at breakfast while chewing my Muesli, on other occasions catching me unawares while reading a book, when the sudden awareness kicks in that, for some inexplicable reason, I haven't done "it" in a while. Just like that, out of the blue - the thought hits me, my brow furrows and I think "Man! It's been at least six months..." Or longer. And I realize that somehow, amidst all the chaos and confusion, I just forgot to...
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If you've ever taken a trip into the unknown, chartered yourself to a place of uncertainty and looming surprise, you will know how I felt like one my way to the Canadian north, sitting next to my brother Adrian as we drove our way out of civilization, headed for a distant wilderness neither one of us could really fathom. We'd been driving for three days, perched above the length of a snaking road in our rickety old camper, trying to fight the heat of a late summer with open windows and makesh...
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The moon was barely a sliver above the mountains, hanging low between a dusk of midnight clouds. In a ring of rolling mist the clouds encircled the valley, the clear night sky rearing over them like a dome dusted with the powder of stars. It was a night of stillness and of peace; a hushed silence had come over the valley and even the mountains seemed to doze. They hid their peaks between the tufted clouds, rising above a distant forest that gazed dreamily into their heights. Far up the valley...
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I stood shivering on the highway in the cold drizzle of an early night, my thumb poised for the passing cars streaking by with a hiss on the shining asphalt. Behind me the sign - San Carno 30 mi - reflected in the glare of lonely headlights and slick rain. I had been there for over two hours, my shoulders hunched with cold as I slowly tread backwards over crunched gravel and scoured the distance for a car that would be my salvation. My hair clung to my cheeks in sodden patches and the flannel...
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Points of possible improvement: "I can just imagine the pained and uncomfortable looks of my male friends, a touchdown scored, and then that bad man pushes him down." The bad man pushes him down? It wasn't until your next sentence that I realized they were watching football on TV. Football, yes, but I wasn't sure if they were playing it themselves or not, since "the bad man pushes him down" doesn't say much to me. Particularly since I don't have a clue about football. Just soccer (European th...
A few small things: "strands sticking to his damp face. " I wouldn't use the word "sticking". Maybe clinging. I wouldn't say it "pisses him off". It doesn't really fit in with the rest of your language; you'd have to include more slang to make it carry. And that wouldn't fit either. "Perhaps the leaders have heard his rant and have decided to up the conditions." I'd rephrase "up the conditions". Once again, it just doesn't fit into the pattern of your descriptions. Aside from that - perhaps r...
It took me a second read to find an interpretation of this piece. I think the first sentence had something to do with that - although it is very well written, it doesn't exactly fit into the concept of the ocean. I know that the second sentence doesn't either, but it is less specific and doesn't refer to any definite objects. A book, even used metaphorically or as a simile, makes me think of something dry and concrete. Something that doesn't go well with water. After that, this piece swims re...
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I set myself on the wooden step that led to the patio. I lit the end of the cigarette and took a long drag. First the critical points: "How odd I thought as I regained the memory of the smoke in hand, inhaling with curiosity." Perhaps you should use italics to separate your thoughts from the rest of the sentence. At first the entire meaning of it was a bit vague - she remembers her cigarette? Perhaps you could rephrase it a little. "but then thought the better of it when I thought of the prob...
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