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AGE: 40
LOC: Mentor, OH
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: March 19

To both of the Sharon’s out there who signed up after me and had to alter your names…  Don’t try to hide… I know you’re out there despising me!

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Query Letter / Vrooman
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18 Reviews   10 Comments
Have you ever left your vehicle unattended with your GPS still on in your front window? Imagine the consequences of someone violating your space and changing your destination without your knowledge. I’ve written a 70,000-word thriller called Vrooman that I hope will keep you on the edge of your seat. The story is set in Tulsa, Oklahoma where middle-aged, hard-working Tom Stone is having the worst day of his life. He lost his job this morning and then his cheating girlfriend dumped him o...
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Quotes / I'm starving...
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4 Reviews   1 Comment
My typed moneymaker sits under dust.
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4 Reviews   1 Comment
I've written masterpieces but nobody cares
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Quotes / six worder...
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I am creatively and personally blocked.
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My biggest enemy's my query letter.
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Limericks / Pen vs Sword
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Flash Fiction / Sarah's Mole
I thought this was a great story. If this were a children's book I'd be interested in it. My 8-year old would think it's funny with colorful illustrations. I like your writing style. Your sentence structure flows smoothly and the dialoque between the mother and daughter is sweet and done very well. It's a very realistic scene that I could easily see me and my daughter acting out. I guess if I had one complaint it would be that there aren't enough descriptives in it. I don't know what the kitc...
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Flash Fiction / Chums
So he breaks free from his captors and runs, falling over the side of a parking garage to his death? I like your writing style. It's very descriptive and edgy, but the thing I don't like about the story is that there's no closure. It's a good scene, but the reader is left wondering _what just happened?_ , _who were those guys?_ , _was it a practical joke gone bad?_ It's vagueness leaves me disappointed, but the writing is good. I like the fast-pacedness of it and the use of your descriptives....
Quotes / six words
I think I'd like it better, "Trapped inside my head - can't escape!" I don't really like the "(comma)trapped(comma)" in such a short quote. Just my opinion. Good luck with it.
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