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I loved this piece! You give us so much to think about and it is well researched. I love your observation that the plight of everyday Americans has not only failed to move ahead of that in the past, but we have actually lost ground. A premise echoed in "Double Income Trap”. Although well written, I assume this is but an outline for future project/s. My advice isn't writing/research related because you have that under control. It is a marketing strategy. Take any of the sub points that you are...

This poem has a very sweet rhythm and message. I just felt good after reading it. Usually I don't like poems that rhyme, but this one was well done. A concise and to the point message of sincerity is this poem's strength. The theme of the quilt as a metaphor for your life worked for me. I don't know where you have submitted this article so far, but I think it has a good chance of being published by a popular ladies journal. My opinion, go mainstream not academic. Great job of a wonderful poem...

I really liked the opening of this poem. I liked the concept of using affirmations and I found the physical layout of the poem to be oddly pleasing. The line "make love in the absence of loneliness" drew me in more and I was ready to enjoy what this poem had to offer. After that however the poem became very confusing for me in both form and content. There were still lines that I liked as stand alones, but the poem as a whole was distracting enough that I lost intrest. Was this intentional and...

I love the language and rythym. I especially appreciate phrases such as "looking into a corner at 90* of nothing" and "your eyes misspeak". I don't know what the poem is about though. I would be curious to know more of what the author intended.

I absolutely love the way you use language. I love the concept of what you are trying to accomplish. I don't think it is quit there. The story was kind of confusing to me in what was actually happening. However, phrases like "I took one last bite of the chocolate éclair, deliciously sweet", "Glass rained down in a sparkling cloudburst", and "blood stained pink suit" that kept me reading. This story definitely warrants a second and third read so I have marked it as one of my favorites.