Ahhhh, there is nothing better then the simple and pure love poem. Just for a littlbe bit of clarity, was the (Iamyours) bit just something you wanted to do for creative edge or does it have some deeper meaning?

A very surreal piece. Reminds me alot of Mr.Bukowski. the I’m alone again Is that supposed to be then I'm alone again? alone again still alone and cold beneath down blanket and Beneath down blanket? Maybe I'm just reading it wrong, but I don't get that part. I’d get up and close the window but I’m naked, it’s cold, and my cat is there hungrily eyeing the squirrels This part is my favorite. The conclusion to it all. The contemplation makes it so far just to sit back and appreciate the reality ...

The repetition of tower, skies, voices, echoes, other/another, and cities was a nice touch. I like how it all came together at the end and it adds a nice creative aspect. But does that restrictedness let you express what you want to? How can you say what you want to say if you're repeating the same thing? It seems you're just saying the same things with a few different words. Not saying it isn't potent already, but I think a little more variety could cause more of an impact then a ripple.

Change is a sensitive topic. It can lead to some of the most lonesome depressing moments of your life. But look at it like this. What if there was no change at all, absolutely none. Would there even be a point? It's not all sad departures but more of a simultaneous morphing of a new world.

Interesting story. Few things I need explained. 1. Why did he want to be incarcerated? 2. Was he just selling the drugs to BE incarcerated?

everything you said was lies… Should be everything you said was a lie. Your grammar really detours from the effectiveness of this poem. All the uncapitalized I's and bad use of contractions really distracted me. Maybe run this through Microsoft Word and go through spell check for a more effective approach. And just for the record, this is more non-fiction then poetry. Try using some figurative language. Some metaphors, allusions, synedoche, even similes. I personally think an extended metapho...

A good, short synopsis. I'm looking forward to the actual story, message me when the story is completed.

Desire. One of the most beautiful topics to write about. a concave lens focaling the gibbous of my want Simple desires can cause the most prefound thoughts, feelings, and emotions a man could feel. cause you to "spin to cocoon" to avoid it all even. good write.

I think the structure and body of the poem covers up cliche imagery and pretty ordinary desciptions. The way a poem is wrote doesn't make the poem interesting, it's the words and description. Maybe work on a little more of an impact with what your trying to say instead of an eye catching display.

haha. A haiku advertisement for credit vultures. priceless.