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AGE: 27
LOC: Belarus
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 17
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Wistfully I lifted my head from the ground. The cold dampness of the earth seeping into the bones of my cheek making it throb. The sky had clouded over and each cloud looked ready to shed innumerable tears swelling into large raindrops as they fall. Any traces of the summer breeze of the last few weeks had passed and now an autumnal wind beckoned from the hills in the distance, leaves stirring in anticipation of shedding themselves from the comfort of their branches. Rotten bracken clung to m...
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Poetry / The Jumper
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Head banging solidly against the wall Slip from the edge I begin my fall Doves fly lonely at this height Dazed by my presence in the half light Slapped back and fixed into position The conclusions I have drawn were a hesitant decision Arms flail in the rushing of the wind Plunging to the ground, punishment for sins Reckless in actions that have drawn your pain Lost and unappreciative of my lusting gain Concludes the vision sing song moments lost Hell awaits my entry with a burning holy frost ...
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Poetry / Reckless Abandon
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Abandon, oh seek me out Deliver from evil to supple emotions. Barren, empty, yet full tp spilling spoils of war manifest to delicate lines Around eyes creased through laughter? Did not I search for truth? Trust in processes, honest in motives Undone now my subtle hatred Collected in pools of fluid, such tears despair to loss of feeling Numbed now to disaffection Twisted, know like melody plays aloud. Weaving to dances unlearned but known Merry rings around oneself, until Dizzied to confusion.
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Poetry / Angered Loving
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Supple light drifts up, lingers Darkness restless haze around From all I am there is nothing Understanding crowds from emptiness Undone, fall, whistfull Simple touched frisk and gather themselves Invasion, space lost to boundry often invisible Given of moments I am lost for your words Destest that wayward smile Defeating my solidarity Stand back, emotions rush forth Barriers give up and relax I did not wish to love you No longer mine Lost in what is yours
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Oh rage does taint me to perfection Twisted to designs of life Manipulates me to edge of reason To dangle hollow from whistless trees Of anger I do betray myself Relentless to obessive conclusions Doubting of mistrustful explanation You are a liar, plain as day Regretfully I do not apologies Shame on you for expections so Hold back your emotions For I do not deserve your envy Could we simply compile lists? Of everyday items that may hold desire Simple in their being, uncomplicated by the year...
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This isn't my taste and I found the opening somewhat laboured as though you were trying too hard. This isn't to say that its not any good. It is. Once I got over the first hurdle I would it engaging and well written. Good luck with your goals.
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I felt this flowed really well and I enjoyed the interplay between characters. Joe brings something out in your main character that intriges me. The humour is well placed and doesn't detract to much from the story, I enjoyed the comments about cohabiting, the choice of words was very discriptive. Keep it up.
Novel Treatments / a dream: excitement
I like the way you writing speaks to the reader as if engaging them in the dramas that are unfolding in the head of this chracter. what you need to be careful of when you carry on writing is that you move away from the "self exploration" other wise the reader is likely to gt bored and move onto something with more envolvement. Of course this could be where your planning on going in which case ignore me. Still for an extract this is good I can see it appealing to the chick lit crowd. Best of l...
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Novel Treatments / Finding an Angel.
I won't worry if I were you. The opening of the chapter is very strong. I really got a sense of Jonathans character and for a moment thought I would perhaps understand why Angela has left. Writing in the note, detailing is contacts was a good idea, it found what she had written intriging. htis made me want to carry on with reading in order to find the answer. this really is a terrific start and I hope this help you. Be confident
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