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AGE: 20
LOC: Mount Union, PA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 28

Note:
To those who requested reviews, I’ve had very little time on my hands lately (and don’t expect that to change any time soon), but I’ll get to your pieces as soon as I can, starting with the first ones and working down the list.
If anyone is considering asking me for a review, you can still do so, although I may not get to you for awhile.
So, if you don’t want to wait, I’m probably not the girl for the job. Otherwise, I’ll be happy to oblige just as soon as I can.
Thank y’all for your interest!


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I’m a crazy bookwormfreak who likes to listen to loud music, mix strange words like “whilst” into much less interesting everyday language, and go to Creation Fest every summer. It’s…

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Short Story / Dreaming Flavors
I'm not entirely sure how to answer your request, "tell me what this style is," but I can help you out on a line-by-line basis. Here 'tis: I'm an aspiring writer, when I started to fall asleep of boredom. I'm guessing that, with this sentence, you mean that you got bored of writing. The statement is pretty vague, though. This makes the reader work too hard to figure out what the connection between "I'm an aspiring writer" and "I started to fall asleep of boredom" is. (And the word "when" seem...
Quotes / Six Word Memoir
Woah! This is so sad! (my initial reaction) But then I realized that it could be interpreted the other way as well, so that "things changed" resulted in no longer just thinking but knowing you could. So I really like that this can be interpreted in two completely different ways - it has just the right amount of ambiguity - and that it says so much by means of implication. All in all, this is my favorite of the 6-word memoirs that I've read so far. Good job!
There's something... I think it's the words "laid bare" that don't quite sit right with me. They don't seem to flow seamlessly with the ink imagery (I can't put any better than that). But I can't think of any suggestions, so you can more or less disregard this qualm. Other than that, it's very clear, concise (kinda necessitated by the 6-word requirement), and, as an explanation of a writer/ink artist's life and work, very fitting.
Quotes / Imagination
Locked
This quote sounds nice, but it doesn't particularly speak to me or grab my attention. Hmm... Hey, what if you were to switch out the comma for a colon? Gained my freedom: found my voice. ...thus binding the two together. I really like it that way. It more explicitly says what I think you're going for - that you exercise your freedom through your voice; that, until you could speak completely as yourself, you could not be free.
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