This was really cute. Haha. I hope I get a child like that some day. What an extraordinarily charming imagination <3 Now, I don't really know what qualifies a text for children's literature, but seeing as I don't think you used any extremely tough words, I'd say you passed. Also, you let the kid ramble. That's good. The short sentences that show up here and there really allows for me to picture a child that just makes everything up as he goes. He's a rambler and they are adorable (I have t...

It may just be me, but this seems a tad too ordinary to be extraordinary? I don't know... The words create no imagery in my mind at all, nothing for me as a reader to think about or interpret. Maybe if it were worded differently?

Better than some of the other ones I've read on here, I admit, though it hardly is *the grandest thing out there*. I like the "I bare my soul in" part, but think "harmony" is a flimsy. I think you could do better, find another word that provokes more feelings and more compassion within the reader - but maybe that's just my opinion.

As it is now, it's not all that good. It could be, but I think you use some of the words too many times - synonyms are nice, I may add - and even though you may have done that on purpose, because sometimes it somehow underlines things greatly when you re-use the same word in order to gain a special effect, it doesn't really work out that way. Stressful pain is in there too many times, as is unkind. Find something else, I'd say (though it is ultimately your choice of course) and perhaps try to...

I don't know if I think this is better than the other one I read about stress (I think it may have been yours? The intro-words are the same, I discovered).Still, I think this poem is somewhat trivial, I'm afraid. It seems ordinary to me, it doesn't really have an effect on me. It is totally ruined, I'm afraid, by the last two lines, due to the fact that you write "I can't sit or stand" and then follow up that sentence with "I try and sit but can't so I stand up", which doesn't really work for...

Hmm... This is by far the least-good one of yours yet. You rhyme, but your rhyming is poorly chosen, I think. It reminds me of those days when you were younger and wrote poetry for an unrequited love and the first thing that popped into your head when you wrote "I am sad" was the words "because you treat me bad" and you wrote it down for the rhyme alone. I think it's a shame in your poem, because I don't feel like it's telling me anything - I just feel like it's trying to show me it can rhyme.

Not all of this made sense to me after a night out and work the following morning, but I did make enough sense of it to say that not only you and Janis feels that way. I really am tired of the entire "You have to plan your future". I'm not saying we should all "Carpé Diem" our ways through life, but really, what is life about if not pleasing ourselves and making sure we go without any regrets in the end? I like your poem. Reminds me of some of my own thoughts which is always nice. Lovely to f...

I really did not like all of the beginning, but I've given you a solid 8 due to your last two lines alone! They were awesome! Great cliff-hangers of some sort and wow - "You left the tower the only way you knew how"! You make me feel partly to blame for her downfall because no one helped her up there - and I don't even know who she is :/ But anyway... A nice attempt at trying to speak the mind of someone who apparently did not have the "guts" to do it herself. It's a downright shame :/

Haha. This was lovely, just lovely. I like how there's definitely an unrequited love and it seems the one in love is trying to have the conversation and the other one sort of doesn't care xD It works brilliantly. A solid 9 from me because I enjoyed it. You wrote "series"... I'll definitely stop by another time to see if there's more of this!

Haha. This is so adorable. A small child trying to find out what's going on xD I really liked it all the way through, though I thought the lines "He tells me he didn't try to eat me / But there's slobber to my knee" weren't as good as the other ones. They fell oddly when they finally arrived. But still - a lovely, cute rhyme for children. It has some definite potential (oh, I so love things written for children).