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LOC: Lindenhurst, NY
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LAST LOGIN: December 15
LOC: Lindenhurst, NY
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: December 15
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I conduct a darkened room symphony, intertwined fingers dance furiously over hot flesh singing, while eyes listen curiously to the soft lips' whispering. Bodies in motion are poetry. Deep waves of bliss rolling over me. Shallow breaths quiver uncontrollably, tending to sober me. Locks of her hair cascade upon my chest in silence yet soon crescendo to violence as her inward silence fades to reveal a dominant lioness- Now our peaceful symphony has become infinitely more interesting. Two bodies ...
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I conduct a darkened room symphony, intertwined fingers dance furiously over hot flesh singing, while eyes listen curiously to the soft lips' whispering. Bodies in motion are poetry. Deep waves of bliss rolling over me. Shallow breaths quiver uncontrollably, tending to sober me. Locks of her hair cascade upon my chest in silence yet soon crescendo to violence as her inward silence fades to reveal a dominant lioness- Now our peaceful symphony has become infinitely more interesting. Two bodies ...
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"The interested become the interesting." -Stefan Vincent
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**TEACHER SEEKS PUPIL MUST HAVE AN EARNEST DESIRE TO SAVE THE WORLD APPLY IN PERSON** ---------------------------------------- But there was no person, no human person, just full immersion into a world of perceptions of true intentions displaying man's two directions. And as I come to the realization that theres not one but two creations- one of culture and nations, and one truly gracious of man's relation to Earth. I witnessed this birth and it showed me what's worth and not worth it. The kn...
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I really have nothing to criticize with the writing. I would read a whole book of this and i also like the subject matter as well as what i can glimpse of the story. The only thing i can give you some help with is content. First of all no one would ever be welding indoors unless they were completely insane and theyd probably burn the house down in short order. Also when welding, you wouldnt be using a torch for that. But like i said, extremely enjoyable.
The imagery is strong and i like pieces with this type of format. The last line is a profound piece in this poem.
Wow, that piece really hits you. It starts off a little slow but it really hooks you in the last 5 lines. The use of uppercase with no punctuation threw me off a little, but im guilty of that myself, so i cant really comment too harshly. Good luck with it.
This piece definitely gets its message across. I think the usage of the word "You" is a bit overdone, and i find the same rhyme in many places to be repetitive. otherwise a well written piece.
This is really cliche, this poem has been written and rewritten by hundreds, if not thousands, of people. Regardless of content, the sentences are very short and staccato which makes it hard to read. Also you have some trouble with apostrophe usage and homonyms. If I were you I'd consider rethinking my theme and reconstructing the piece around that theme in a more creative manner. I'm just being honest.
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