Questions Just one time And my body quivers My eyes roll back And it makes me shiver Such an explosion You touch me in disbelief The warmth flows over you To me such a relief I’ve waited so long I want you to know I’m so sorry now Its time for me to go Its time for the question So I can end this ride What is this really about Ecstasy or Suicide
Sold Out I’ve sold out Given in Ridin on the wages of sin Done what you wanted What was expected of me Thrown away my beliefs For you Can I face me Glaring in a mirror Everything I didn’t want to be Makes me shiver Waisted all the years I wake up in terror The greed The hate Forgot about the needy They still wait While I congratulate myself Selling out Not how I wanted I’m forever taunted By those before me I was the one that was the one Even a blind man can see
Tonight I killed myself I didn’t mean to I didn’t want to Why did I Tonight I killed myself I was at the party My friends were there The night began to fly Tonight I killed myself I had a beer And another I was feeling the buzz Tonight I killed myself I had a shot Just one Just for fun Tonight I killed myself My friends are all here All laughing with cheer I’ll have just one more beer Tonight I killed myself It was time to leave, to go You told me no I said I’d go slow Tonight I killed myself...
I fell in love once Only once Or was it a dream I had been scheming Your fire pieced my heart Through my heart Was it just make believe I was relived. You are so thoroughly real to me And I can see you in the light Of the heat that you put out for Everyone but me or No-one but me can see You in the certain mood Had the mood But was that mood mine or Belonging to someone else Why do I feel this way I had the day All under control and Had forgotten you Until I saw you once more
I had a dream We met and you touched me Touched me in ways Ive never been touched Not with your hands but with the heart A heart that felt as if it were going to burst With the excitement of that one second Something I thought was no longer possible Was this a dream or a premonition Something that could happen Or a song never to be sung Has the time passed me by will I be touched again If it were not to be Why do I still feel Touched
This is kindof fun and serious all at the same time. It's very well written though sometimes seems forced. Your point is here though and that what matters. Good work.
For a 1st chapter this is good. It keeps you wondering what happened to his wife and daughter. It has the conflict of whomever did something to her. It has the storm brewing outside as well as inside him. You really make someone want to continue reading this which is what you want in the first chapter.