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AGE:
15
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 15
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 15
yes i know my writings isn’t grammatically correct. i also am aware that i don’t capitalize things.
it’s my style.
i can’t stand the sterility of perfect pieces of text, and thats why i do what i do.
theres a lot of symbolism in my work. and it’s often repetitive.
it’s not so much hardcore novel style as it is poetic.
it’s something new.
and it doesn’t have to appeal to anyone.
www.myspace.com/xsuburbiabombx
P.S.
everything i’ve posted so far i a chunk of a novel i’m attempting.
check the myspace for more info on it.
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My Friend Scoot I have a friend, his name is Scott, but I call him Scoot. Every Thursday I scoot on down to the office and we talk; Sometimes about stuff that makes us cry, and sometimes about stuff that makes us laugh. Scoot is one of my best friends. When he's around I feel safe, not exactly protected like I feel with Emily, but like you do when you have a warm blankie by the fire in the middle of a snowstorm with your mommy bringing you hot chocolate. Scoot is about 6 feet a bazillion inch...
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i sat in silence. i sat in maddening silence. i sat in maddening silence and watched the world go by. and while i sat, i thought, and while i thought, my heart ached. real pain. none of that emo bullshit. my heart was actually throbbing. pounding. pulsating. it was on fire. and it fucking hurt. and every fucking beat reminded me i was alive. every fucking beat made me hate myself more. every fucking beat reminded me of everyone i had hurt. i am sick. i am sick and twisted. i ruin everything. ...
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i am screaming. my insides are screaming. i am angry, and sick, and tired. i am angry, and sick, and tired, of myself. i'm filled with self hatred. my insides are screaming. they are screaming because they don't want to be my insides. they're screaming because their ashamed of me. and i agree with them. i hate myself. i fucking hate myself. i hate my hands. i hate my eyes. i hate the mirror for showing me these things. i am angry and i hate everything. i want to destroy myself. i want to disa...
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i walked in. i sat down. she looked at me, i stared back. she was old. she was grey. her hair went down to her shoulders and curled at the ends. the skin on her neck sagged, the skin on her face sagged, her boobs sagged, her eyes sagged, it was a wonder her glasses were still on her face. she observed me, i observed her. the game was set, the rules wordlessly declared, she was the hunter i was the prey, trying to con her out of her next meal. 'so...' 'sylvia' 'so sylvia' 'what?' 'so your psyc...
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'spike.' ... 'look at me spike' ... 'you cant do this to me spike' ... 'spike i'm your best friend, you can't do this to me' 'im sorry char' 'for what' 'for existing' 'don't be' 'i'm pathetic' 'you're not' 'i hate myself' 'you shouldn't' 'i do so fuck off' 'i'm not leaving you' 'you will, they all do' 'i wont i swear' 'bullshit' 'stop it' 'NO YOU STOP, YOU'RE AMAZING, AND NICE AND AWESOME AND BEAUTIFUL, I RUIN EVERY BEAUTIFUL, I. AM. A. MONSTER.' she came and held me, it was warm in her arms,...
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I love it. And I love that you don't capitalize, I don't either (just on reviews:). I don't quite understand the last stanza, but that might just be me. Good Job. I rated you highly.
Nice song :) I'm guessing you don't care that there is no capitalization because it's a song. To which I say, more power to yah! So unless you wanna capitalize, there is nothing wrong with this piece. :)
Amazing voice, absolutely amazing. The only thing you should improve on is your reuse of words. like "the girl" try and switch it up a bit, I'm not saying it's bad just that it messes with the flow of your piece.
It seems more like it should be under poetry than short story. In all honesty it doesn't make much sense, you need to go through and describe things better, it gets sketchy otherwise.
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