I like this one it is how I see the writer's life.

I do not feel this one truly represents what you are about or what any writer that is still trying is about.

Is that really how you want to be remembered?

All in all you tell a good story. Personal experience is sometimes a very vivid thing and I think that maybe you could touch on the vivacious feel a little more than you did. Be more descriptive and let the feelings make themselves clear. As for the items in parenthesis. Drop the first set it is unecessary and holds no real descriptive value. Keep the "sunny of the second and drop the now. There was a small error, you need a "the" in front of Smithsonian. Your writing here is clear and precis...

I must say you creae a story that pulls the reader in. I have read other chapters of this and each I read just makes me love your characters more. The raw emotion in this chapter is powerful.

You hae a wonderful talent at creating a believable love relationship. As always I am impressed.

I liked the poem in that a deeper meaning can be found. It speaks to and of the inner man. I am however wearied by the continual use of the ing and past tense and think that this would be a much more powerful piece if it were brought into a present tense.

Love poems are the heart of poetry in my opinion and this was written in a tone and tense I appreciate. I found it rather long and involved but pleasingly so and warnings always intrigue me. The use of the historical greek was an addition I found particularly endearing. Over all a great write and refreshing when in this world so many are writing the woe woe woe of it all.

Well done over all. I found the word choices excellent and the intro unecessary. A few of the longer lines I think could/should be broken but it really takes very littel away from the smooth flow and is a minor issue.

Reading this took me back to a cafe where I would listen to the words of poets on stage where one of the poet's every poem spoke directly to me and I would hang on each word and swirl it about in my mind - I love things that make me thing and take me on a journey all my own. In poetry the art and beaty of it is not always to see exactly what the writer experienced but to sometimes take a journey all our own on thier words. So Thank you for letting me travel on your words.