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LOC: Green Bay, WI
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: March 09
LOC: Green Bay, WI
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: March 09
Update 1-15-08
Never fear I haven’t stopped writing. All the comments and reviews that I have received I really appreciated. Allowed me to view my work from a different perspective. I am currently revising the Destined series. It will take some time considering there are eight books in the series. Again thank you all. I will continue to review others work and eventually begin to put my work out here again.
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Chapter Movin On The sun beat down heavily as Del attempted to roll over on the couch falling to the floor with a thud. Del winched sitting up between the couch and the coffee table. He sat for a long moment tasting the leftovers of his dinner and stale drink that filled his mouth. As with everyday in the past year Del walked into the bathroom and stared at his reflection. His light brown eyes were red and slightly swollen. His handsome featured face unshaven and his dark hair an unkempt mop....
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Chapter Three - Family Cursed Del sat on his couch and stared down at the book. He ran his fingers over the cover that was thickly embossed. The heavy leather cover was beaten with age. A small push lifted in his stomach as he fingered the book and he suppressed it with a frown. A small latch secured the cover of the eight inch book. He released the rusty clasp and opened the book. Sitting back on the couch he pulled the book close to his face. He frowned at the small writing on the page. He ...
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Chapter One - Lost and Found -BENTAR PROVINCE- A dark blue skyline was being toyed with by a young man with a smooth slender pale face and long black hair. He lay on his back slowly making cloud formations. The sky became starkly dark and rain began falling onto his face. He smiled as the droplets hit his face. Closing his eye and concentrating the rain began to land everywhere but on the young man. “You really should be using your abilities for something better than cloud formations and rain...
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Something Wiccan this Way Comes The heavy pounding reaches my ear Wake with a jerk as this time grows near Day into night this cycle will repeat The toss and turn of nights lost sleep Not for the fate, soft or meek A glance, A glare, A stare then peek Time is time as its WILL soon be Its very nature dominates me The pull is strong as I must be Its moving face watching me From left to full then right to face The sway of its essence my hearted place The pounding waves beat like drums When somet...
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Preface In a far off galaxy about a trillion light years away from the Milky Way a lineage of prophecies were coming to pass. Although these many tellings were about to upset the entire balance of a galaxy one TRUE prophecy was foretold and it was necessary for the many to suppliment the one. Between the two galaxies an unstable wormhole flashed in and out of existence. The anomaly caused time to proceed at a much slower rate on the Mikly Way end of the wormhole. In converse time moved extrem...
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I enjoyed read this, it was a very interesting looking for both points of view (male and female). I would definitely like to her more from Donnas point of view. Joe is a typical young male, inexperienced and living for the day. If this is a memoir of some sort I would love to read the entire text.
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For God and Country: a story of the 2nd Marine Division and the battle for Tarawa Atoll: 20-28 No...
Would interested in actually reading this all the way through. Like the description but needs a little proofing, "Running out grenades they faced a further...." Maybe should say "As the grenades ran low they faced a further stalemate that was aided by the advancing Sherman tanks." Completely removing the next sentence and moving up the "The rounds from it’s cannon let the Japanese know they were in trouble and the remaining men soon evacuated the post." Good stuff, but a re-write would withou...
This does fall into the loose definition of flash but as far as fiction goes it still needs work. Love the mystery portion of this short story but it need more personalization. Giving the characters names and maybe giving more detail as to why he selected her.
I've read several stories along this line (emanate destruction of the human race). Its hard when reviewing submissions like this because it is plausible as far as the circumstance. Anyway this is what I see. I see a main character thats very self centered. In all sci-fi there needs to be a believable line. I find it hard to believe that someone with the abilities to allow dreams into reality would be able to lock down their subconscious to stop unwanted things from happening. I believe there ...
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