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AGE:
46
LOC: Albuquerque, NM
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 23
LOC: Albuquerque, NM
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 23
I have been writing in one form or another since my days in high school where I published in the school newspaper. In college, I continued writing for newspapers before moving on to “professional” publications. I first wrote for music magazines such as Rock Scene (one cover story), Kerrang! (England), Music Connection (two covers), and Metal Rendezvous (three covers). Later, I began covering high school sports before finally coming upon poetry. For the last eight years, I have worked to become a better poet and writer. Recently, I was published in “Earthships: A New Mecca Poetry Collection.” In December, 2007, I will have three of my pieces featured in Lunarosity, an online journal. Previously, I was published in Central Avenue, a…
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Soul Searching America, I worry about you There was a time when your seven letters Could look into a mirror and reflect: Justice Freedom Honesty When you planted trees so we could breathe But your boughs are breaking Your cradles falling Down comes the hammer Smashing mirrors until only two letters are left: M – E If black and white are the extremes Everyone else looks both directions Wonders which will yield the highest return on investment Root money searches the underground for new holy wa...
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Deck The Halls with boughs of holly fa la la la la, la la la la Tis the season to be jolly fa la la la la. la la la la Don we now our "fine" apparel? In the dictionary, the word "gay" is defined as happy, bright, keenly alive, exuberant Yet, place it in a Christmas carol it invokes fear deep enough that some say enough is enough erasing it as if it never existed as if it's not a word, but an implication I'm standing in the back of a church auditorium listening to second graders croon "Deck Th...
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This sounds like a piece I've always wanted to write except this one is you writing about your friend. I've always wanted to write my own obituary. I thought this had a nice flow. Quite frankly, seeing the title, I thought there would be a connection to MLK. Not sure how I feel about that. Good job.
I liked this, but I do fear that it will take several readings, as it did for e, to get what you are saying. The phonetic language may take away from the piece.
I have a very hard time with rhyming poetry. I always feel that the rhymes are forced. In this piece, I thought you weren't doing too bad until you got the to the end. That rhyme of "yes" and "guess" seems very forced. I don't want to assume anything, but I believe you were simply looking for any word that rhymed with yes and settled on the first thing you could find. It may be that those last three to four lines need to rewritten. I hope that this helps.
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