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AGE:
59
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 09
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 09
After years of writing for every boss I’ve ever had and supplementing my income with freelancing, a recent lay-off (well, almost a year ago) made me re-think my situation. Now I’m making my living with freelancing, articles and commercial writing.
There was a time when I wrote fiction and am trying to get back into it. A book is in the works (16 chapters so far) that is still non-fiction but will be fictionalized before presenting for publication.
I’ve joined Urbis to get feedback and direction toward eventually expanding my abilities to include fiction. Any constructive advice you can give to that end is greatly appreciated.
Thank you for visiting.
Laura
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CHAPTER 1 Setting the Scene I enjoyed sleeping on the screened back porch and dozing off to the sound of the summer’s breeze through the trees and the crickets. Fireflies twinkling in the dark night were somehow comforting. It was that kind of night when loud voices brought me out of my warm, blissful slumber. Marie, I called her “ReeRee”, grumbled as Pat staggered through the house to the back porch. ReeRee held on to her as she bumped into furniture, threatening to overturn the lamp on the ...
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Born. Abused. Survived. Write. Sanity thriving.
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Fired. Writing. Broke but spirit soaring.
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“LAURA SAW AN OLIVE… …while floating in a martini.” He scrawled the words across the blackboard, angry and frustrated. “And that, Miss Mikash, is a ‘dangling participle!” Long before “Ms.” was considered acceptable in 1964, Mr. Eugene Kuklinski spit those words at me. Having gotten class attention with the force of his voice, the silence seemed interminable with me in the center of it. He finally did go on to further explain the “dangling participle” in a firm but not so angry voice, to inclu...
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I CAN DO THIS! By Laura M. Anderson I was fascinated at seven years old when Dad perched me on the gas tank and took me for a spin. Later I was scolded if I hung out with “bikers” because “good girls” didn’t do that. Then came a family and a motorcycle just wasn’t feasible. The years passed and watching a group of women riding their motorcycles in a parade, it dawned on me! Kids are grown! No husband to protest! I can get a motorcycle! I can do this!” More than one woman has followed this pro...
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You mention your grammar, spelling, typing, etc. in your notes to the reviewer. While I can appreciate pulling out older work for review, I really will suggest you go over it before submitting. You have a good story but the technical end of it is a distraction during the read. There were some abrupt changes of scene that took me by surprise. One minute William is asleep in his father's chair. The next he's driving to the cemetery. The transition could have been better. Did he sleep in the cha...
I'm not a military buff and I know nothing about the war in Russia. However, your skill in story telling had me on the edge of my seat, "turning pages" and wanting to know more. I also am not aware of what the market is for this type of story. However, if an agent or publisher can market it properly, I'm sure they won't be disappointed with the results. This was only a single chapter...I'd like to read the backgrounds of the characters, get to know them and put their current struggles into pr...
Brief, to the point, but what a sad commentary! I guess I still like to see happy endings.
You asked for honesty...here goes. I liked the story idea: husband and wife going to her company party. I don't know of any husband who enjoys that activity. Your main characters, Sarah and Josh, seem to be really hateful people. There didn't seem to be any redeeming qualities in either of them. Both were mean-spirited, judgmental and degrading, and particularly hateful to each other. This makes it difficult to relate to the characters since no one is all bad or all good. We all have both wra...
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