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In the beginning, the world was rot and wretched, not suitable for living organisms of any kind. Immeasurable infinitesimal cracks and divots along the distraught lackluster surface, fashioned waterless tributaries leading to ocean-less basins. Overwhelming clouds of sulfur blanketed the sky; as to if there had been life, they would have never known the warmth of the sun. Gale winds ravaged the landscape, dispersing sulfur into every inch and crevasse of the planet. Earthquakes far beyond the...
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This is beautiful work. One can draw many parallels and relations to the word in which you depict. "And ever growing is your hate for strangers. Who are only able to stare and relinquish their false cares." This statement vaguely projects a sense of the real world in which we live in. Not everyone is truly a friend; some just have to become acquaintances. These acquaintances can tend to be a little more than untrustworthy and pretentious. The only line I don’t clearly understand is the contra...
This was excellent piece...The only problem if can find it with it grammatically is in "Now its just getting to easy." Assuming that you mean, "It's getting to easy" rather than the possessive "its" that you used. Other than that it is flawless. I can get a sense of underlined meaning deeper in the words. The poem is simplistic, concise and to the point. Good Job.
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Excellent work! There is a level of clarity within the writing that allows me to vividly depict the text in my head. My favorite lines are: "The rain of tears obscured By beads of sweat of an emotionless regret." it shows me an emotional side of you that I previously beleived was lacking..... I mean..god damn..you really are human...
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Is this a reference to situation B? If so I'm guessing marshmallow has to do with Smores? haha. Anyway....I can somewhat get a sense of your contemplative mood concerning the events unfolding at present point.....It gives me an indepth look at what is going on inside your head. Bravo.
I would have to say that this piece contains a very interesting and perplexing storyline. The story itself was grammatically sound. And to my not so very keen eyes contained no spelling errors. The actual concept is quite intriguing, I found myself lost at first as the opening line simply thrust the reader into this futuristic (At the time I wasn't exactly sure it was futuristic) world. The characters, although not explicitly described, are very well written and one can really ascertain a fee...
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