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AGE: 20
LOC: Grand Prairie, TX
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: December 31

Hi, my name is Christopher. I’m 18 years old and I write (who would have known?)

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Flash Fiction / The New Vintage
Version 2
22 Reviews   0 Comments
Dad grew his hair back out once Mom left. The tangled mess of gray rested on the shoulders of his coffee-stained maroon tuxedo. Ass in the air, he rummaged through the closet to find his ostrich boots from high school. I sat on his king-sized bed and watched him, a man now. “You’re a teenager again. Remember that,” I told him as he found his boots from behind the vacuum cleaner. He sat down on Mom’s vintage chest and put them on. He stood and circled around, extending his arms out like he wa...
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Version 4
2 Reviews   2 Comments
Robert Thompson entered his room at the Craft Hotel. He took his shoes off, setting them and a black duffel bag next to the door. Robert cringed at the décor, yellow-coated walls with white stripes. He crossed the room and shut the curtains. He sat down on the bed—dirt color, grimy, and filthy in appearance. Robert stripped the bed naked, tossed the sheets across the room, and sat back down on the mattress. He picked up the remote and turned on the television set. “Yeah you wish! You couldn’...
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Flash Fiction / Atomic Love
Version 8
32 Reviews   0 Comments
We couldn’t sleep. Bodies intertwined, we pointed out constellations in the white specks of ceiling crust. “Now that looks like a bear,” I said. She squinted. “Where?” “Right there! Look, that’s the head. Those are its arms. And that’s the big body. Can you see it now?” “Now I can.” She smiled and we laughed. Our noses rubbed and we breathed into each other. Eyelashes entangled, she asked, “If you could give me anything in the world, what would it be?” “The world itself.” “Can someone give a...
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Flash Fiction / Metamorphosis
Your writing is wonderful and the style is great. Your diction is vast and impressive. I really liked how this woman was a lost soul looking for the pieces to bring her life back together. I dont know if you ever went into what actually happened to her to cause this, if you did, well then I missed it. But I thought the whole thing came together great and the pacing was good as well. I really liked the description of the dream, a sort of destruction of the world. Very nice work. I wish I could...
Flash Fiction / His victim
Well I was really enjoying this piece--the writing style, the philosophical way the crime scene was protrayed, then it turned out to be a sort of humorous story which threw it off for me. I was expecting something serious, because the writing showed seriousness. And the bad thing about these Urbis related stories is that they are useless every where but there, so dont expect them to be published. But I really would like if you turned this into something serious. Take out that last line and pr...
Flash Fiction / A Fairy Tale
Well I wont comment on the punctuation or grammar. Story wise you did make me interested in what was going to happen next. I was eager, reading through the sentneces, wanting to find out what he say. I think there should be a lot more though. Your style is pretty good and I think as a stand alone story, this isn't all that strong. Maybe if you expanded it, talk about the storm before hand, the character himself, what he saw, and what had happened afterward. Do that, and you may have yourself ...
Short Story / Millenium Bridge, York
You've definitely got talent, that's for sure. I can't tell that immediately by the writing style and the great diction you have. And you decided to go with second person perspective, huh? That is very uncommon and a difficult thing to do, you're good if you pull it off well. And it seems like a very good start. The imagination of this story is overflowing. I really enjoyed it. I cant wait to see where you go with this piece.
Flash Fiction / Three Acts in Three Blocks
I liked this piece a lot. The very first part sort of reminds me of Family Guy. The type of humor it seemed like. I thought the whole thing would be like that but it all turned out very strange indeed. I really liked the random poetic comments throughout the story (even he finds them odd) Very good, creepy a little bit. Good style too. I see this as a publishable piece.
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