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"Permission to love." Can I Love You! If your not too busy with the rest of the world I'd like to share a few ideas. Cook you my favorite foods, watch my favorite shows tell you one secret, one confession, one fear. I can listen between the lies, I mean read between the lines, You haven't loved anyone this way in a long long time. Feels like your first kiss better yet the first you were touched softly behind the school at the tree everyone thought, sombody was buried inside. I won't allow you...
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Det.Hall wasn’t really too interested in Natalie anymore, or finishing the case for that matter. The mix of confusion & mis direction bothered him more than anything, he finally admitted his interest in the case was simply to get close to Natalie (* maybe, I need to read the earlier chapters & find out what’s his story in all this.) Now things were beginning to surface without reason or origin & he had to know; why. He called the mystery girl at 4:30 precisely & sprinkled his own mis directi...
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Where do I begin. I forgot I was reading & just veered off into my Motion Picture mind. I felt like I was watching a great classic film on A&E or something. "Good, Good read man." First i'm thinking, man this guy is a pimp "Ladies man." It kept me reading & I liked both stories of the girls. All though I did wanna know how Rose got tha std & if Lilly got it as well. Very good stuff man. Every line every word painted a picture of great detail. The intro set it off 4 me. I Enjoyed it.
I was kind of lost in the beginning couple of paragraphs.First the boxing then the studio. Both I thought were well descriptive & entertaining. I've got a home studio so I felt a little excited reading about this one. I like the fact you put in the fight before the fight ( i forget what its called.) Great work man.
Wow, why couldn't this be longer. Great opener for the reader. I didn't know if this guy was dirty harry or like a James Dean or something. Great dialog & I felt like I was right there next to the cop. The store scene was good & full.I guess the cop instinct has this guy searching for the girl. I don't know if i'd be up & ready to find some girl (or Prostitute.) after getting drunk in a casino. It sounds like he's being set up, but with the great mis direction going on Maybe he's conncted to ...
WOW. Ok, first this is great, thanks for all the info & knowledge, 2nd, it's sad i don't have 2 bucks right now to buy this book from amazon, but I get paid 2 morrow (yeaaaaaaaaaa)Strunk and White’s Elements of Style will b right here with me the very next time I begin my rewrite. I agree about schools teaching to write, they want you to become all these things when you grow up, but why not begin the process early on in school, High school at least. Everyone seems to teach the same way, & eve...
I don't know quite why, but during reading this I immediatley turned on my equipment to put music to your lyrics, Great song, good words or what I don't know, I'm working on a few things right now & this song may have just inspired ( no it did) inspire me to create something based on this song. (sorry 4 the long sentence.) N e way, I enjoyed it, thanks 4 the inspiration.
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