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AGE:
66
LOC: Baconton, GA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 15
LOC: Baconton, GA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 15
I got my BA in English Lit decades ago and have always been a writer wannabe. I have a nice fat sheaf of rejection letters to attest to my attempts to get published, some with encouraging handwritten notes on them. I have published 50 or so short articles in workplace publications and I’ve edited several books. It was a blast getting fan letters for eBay ads I wrote a while back. Also, I was lucky enough to get a scholarship to a writing workshop in France. Most of the writing I do now is professional reports and there are a lot of those. When I joined Urbis a while back, I hoped it would get me writing something else again. It did, to the point that I had no time for Urbis. I have written a novel of about 80K words, that is now in …
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Never there for me, You had no choice, nor did I. If you were alive, Father, Would you wish for me As I wished for you? I longed for you, but knew naught But emptiness, empty nest.
Version 2
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Never there for me… You had no choice, nor did I Would you wish for me As I wished for you? Longing for what I knew not But emptiness, empty nest.
Version 1
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Never there for me… You had no choice, nor did I Would you have wished for me As I wished for you? Longing for that I knew not But emptiness, empty nest.
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A My eternal love Heart's reviver, soul's delight Why have you left me? B My forever love Heart’s delight, soul reviver Never to return
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A My eternal love Heart's reviver, soul's delight Why have you left me? B My forever love Heart’s delight, soul reviver Never to return
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This is very creative. It has the potential to be very good, but you have to fix the errors, many of which I've fixed for you below. Unless and until you have this grammatically perfect, you have little to no choice of publishing it. For a single story, you may want to look at a magazine that publishes kid or horse fiction. But you will need to take out the incubus. A sexual being does not fit in this story. Also, you need to get off to a faster start. Most of the first bit is not necessary. ...
Russ, I read all of this once and most of it three times. My brand new computer-- that is going back to the store tomorrow-- kept shutting down and losing my comments. I'm not too worried about points anyhow, so didn't try to recreate them. I know you had this professionally edited, but do have some concerns. For example, this sentence, "His escape was preceded by the metallic ladder a few feet away." just doesn't make sense. What were you trying to say here? This is the only error of this s...
This is throughly lovely, something completely obfuscated by your title.
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