This poem really hit home for me. It helps when your audience understands where you are coming from with your work. I do not think it is cliche at all. On the first stanza you spelled breathed as "breatheed". Other than that, this poem is perfect. Don't change it for anybody. I will definitely keep reading your work. Thanks for the inspiration!

This poem really hit home for me. It was very nice to know that I am not the only one who has moved on from an old relationship but can still smile about the good times it held. I like how you made the last line separate from the rest of the poem. Overall, it was a great piece of work.

This poem had an excellent structural format. However, I am not so sure if I liked all of the questions. I feel like that is all that the poem is. Maybe you made it this way for a reason. Hard to tell. Maybe you are left with question so that is all you are going to leave your reader with. If this was what you were going for, then congratulations!!!

Awesome concept! I love the fact that just not a baby was born, but a mother was born as well. I had never thought of that. You are very creative! I am going to assume you are writing from personal experience, so congratulations!!! Your stanzas also make your poetry stand out. I am not so great at using stanzas. Maybe one day I can be just as good as you!

The purpose of this poem is a little hazy for me. However, you do portray emotion very well in your work. The fourth stanza includes something very interesting, "tiptoeing round you". I love the fact that you didn't put the "a" at the beginning so that the flow is not interrupted. I also think that when people use curse words it often takes out a lot of description in their poetry. Instead of saying "Dammit!", explain what you are feeling. It will give the reader a more personal sense of your...

I like the concept of this poem. It is not your traditional poem about love and loss, but rather a peculiar subject that is rarely thought of as significant. You do put a grand spin on this though and I would definitely recommend it to other readers.

I did not find the myself wanting to read more and more of this piece. It was slightly interesting, but it could have something to do with the fact that I cannot stand politics and I do not particularly like people who are afraid of hard work. Keep doing what you do kid, maybe it will work out for you.

This poem is very secretive. It is not easy to decipher the subject in which you were trying to describe. If this was your purpose, then congratulations. If it was not, I would consider being a bit more specific. Maybe you could lengthen your stanzas.

This poem specifically hit home for me and I completely agree. The structure is a little weak, but I figure when you wrote it you were very upset and the words more flowed freely, and those are the best kind.

The beginning of the poem was slightly confusing to me. However, the more that I read, the more interesting the poem became. The rhythm became very distinct in the middle of the poem. Beautiful word usage. The overall concept of the poem intrigued me.