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LOC: Fort Worth, TX
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LOC: Fort Worth, TX
GEN: Male
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It was a Friday evening in June that was not unlike any other Friday in the summer time. People were hitting the house for a triple S-shit, shower and shave- and headed out in the world to get their grove on. Frankie had just gotten off the train, picked up her children from the baby sitter, a elderly Jamaican woman they simply called Jah-Momma, and was headed down Jerome Ave. when, like clock work, she ran into Ricky. “Sup, girlfriend” yelled Ricky in her usual over the type manner. The two ...
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The descriptives terms and imagery were dizzying for me. It seemed way too wordy. Sorry, just my slant. I felt like if we dispensed with some of the wordiness we could have gotten to the point. Who is this dude? Why did he breakdown? The over abundance of words used in the descriptions were delightful at first but I eventually became ticked off. Maybe it's because I knew I only had so much to read and I knew, with all the wordiness, I wasn't going to find out anything in this sample.
Very good and to the point. However I found myself wanting more. I wanted another stanza and another verse. Guess that's just me. But it did move me. The fact that the words were so few made me want to run them over my mind's taste buds again and again. good job.
this poetry was instantly moving. as I read it I was filled with emotional ups and downs that transcended the office chair in which I sat and read. I feel it's a very good piece of writing that should be and could be published. best of luck to you in all of your endeavors.
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