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AGE:
17
LOC: Albuquerque, NM
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 28
LOC: Albuquerque, NM
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 28
I’ve always been absolutely horrid at describing myself for others. Most of what you need to know about me, you’ll discover if you talk to me. I’m a very artistic, loving, compassionate, articulate, and sarcastic person.
Short of that, I act, I sing, and I am a black belt.
I found writing in my freshman year of High School, when two of my closest friends passed on. Poetry has become my outlet for emotional venting ever since.
If there’s anything else you need or want to know, feel free to ask.
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(In a restaurant) (Jane sits at a table center. She is fidgety, nervous. She ruffles through her pocket and pulls out a crumpled piece of stationary/paper. She smooths out the note on the table and reads aloud) Jane: “Dear Jane...to meet you...You don’t know me but I’d like to help....Cassio’s Restaurant down on 6th....at 6 PM...”(Pause)Well, I’M HERE! (Takes out cigarette and lights up) Where is he? Brian: (Enters, and aside. He speaks on a cell phone, possible spot to indicate aside) I just...
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(Note: All text written in this format denotes suggestions) Scene One (At Rise: The girls stand in various groups, talking amongst themselves. Father McCocklin enters followed by Mother Superior, and Sister Virginia. All girls quickly move into a straight line focused intently on Father McCocklin) (Dialogue to Introduce girls) Father McCocklin: Girls, Girls, Girls. Today you embark not only on a quest for personal enrichment, but also to take another step on down the road toward heaven. (Girl...
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My Angel. Mon Ange. I don't know if I can ever stand hearing those words again. I may not be paralyzed, but...I just can't move. I can't bring myself to move on, because I'm not with you. I don't know if I ever will be, and it hurts. It hurts all the more to know that you're there, to hear people say you don't exist, just because they haven't seen you, and most importantly, to look around, see all the happy people, see the contact, the love, and not have anything physical I can share that wit...
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Hold tight for appeasement more Ecstatic toward her soft touch. Soft sighs, worlds spinning, Arms Encircle her, enraptured world. Take the hold of something blind. Follow in faith of all that you can’t see, like stead in greater beings, greater things. Take the leap of faith. With eyes wide shut, taken My hand along for the ride. Enfolded arms, a cross of my protection Many talk of wide eyes, Fear of the unknown. But, With eyes wide shut, all one knows is what surrounds The ignorant bliss of ...
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Last awhile, everlast Awaken dreams of deepest mindset Consist along, deep within my long waking hours My life, my love. Exsistance, futile without you. Breathe The air in a loves filled lung. The mortality, lasts eternal, the power of life The spark within each mind and heart Beat and drum, life spent Eternal passion, fuel the fires Fire, scorch, burn the sides Filled with desires Last awhile, my everlasting dream My waking heart that slumbered eternal Awoken by loves first sweet, tender Lov...
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Such a quote is the entirity of the writer's world. Although I do not personally agree with it, the truest forms of art via literature are born out of the most destitute minds, situations, and circumstances. This said quote, is a bit vague, which, in my opinion, allows for whomever reads it to draw their own connections and conclusions about it. Artistic.
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The Yellow Wallpaper is one of my favorite stories. Like that piece, this one conveys the lasting desire to "Pick back" layers of oneself and of one's harsh surroundings in order to find the basic fundamental reality that exists in each and every person. A great..."everyman" piece. To me, this sounds like an expression of teenage or lasting angst against something that resembles what the heroine underwent during The Yellow Wallpaper. Thank you for the write, it was an excellent read.
Personally, I'd like to see all of the stanzas of your piece have the same amount of lines. It's just a little....OCD thing I have. Yeah, that isn't very helpful, just keep in mind. Many readers like to see continuity in the piece they read. Okay, on to your goals. To have a talent worth shaping, I gave you an eight. This is a heartwrenching poem, very human and true. That is the essence of poetry. To not only incite a response from your audience, but to influence them with the beauty and pur...
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