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LOC: Acton, MA
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A Single Red Rose Her tears dampened his shirt as he cradled her in his arms. The night air chilled them. He held her. He held her closer as she sobbed softly. He smoothed her fine curls. She looked beautiful at the beginning of the night. Her hair curled around her face, her eyes a beautiful bright green. The dark blue, satin dress flowed over her curves accentuating them. The dress was now dripping wet her hair beginning to return to its natural straightness. “It’s okay.” He whispered soft...
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The Iron Gate By Lauren Brooks Set: A thick iron gate, curtains can be used as stone walls, but there must be a wall of some sort. Lights up: on a barren, stark stage with a giant iron gate surrounded by huge stone walls, walls are illuminated from behind by multi-colored lights that give off the feeling of paradise. Two figures approach the gate, it opens and one figure goes in. the other is about to follow when a young girl enters (SR). The figure goes over to her. She is young, about 19 sh...
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Forever I stopped saying forever The day I went away And tried to get through The pain they always kept at bay I remember the embraces And all the silly faces And every moment spent in un-subsiding laughter I stopped saying forever The day I had to leave Now I’ve learned how to cry And really how to grieve I keep my tears and laughter Safe in a special box Only for me to open And only for me to lock I stopped saying forever The day I was forced to go And learned the boundaries of the heart Wo...
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Wow this is a really cool story line. You convey the surroundings of the characters really well. I could see the chamber behind the wine rack. It gets a little confusing when Winnie comes in and then Janessa gets swept up too, it happens a little fast. A little more detail in that section would be much a ppreciated. The srroundings of the evil character, or at least I assume he's evil, aren't as real as the surroundings of Lauriana. I think you need to lay out his layer a little better and th...
haha, funny. I like that this lymeric is in fact flawed by lymeric standards. I think it works a lot better if the lymeric is read outloud so you can actually get the rythm, you might want to suggest that in your notes.
that's disgustiongly hilarious. I love the idea of a woman's vagina being the hole that every kid wants to dig to China, I think a little more detail (I mean about the actual, girl and not her vagina) would make it more interesting and visual
I love the use of "wife" instead of life, it's very amusing. I also like the "blood-stained wedding dress" but I think it needs more of what happens. Our minds are left to imagine what has happened to the bride and groom never to be, but a little hint would be nice...
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