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I really really really like the way you wrote this story. I like how you do as if an interview. Its so realistic and easier to get into. I felt so bad for angel, and good that he saved her. And then its said what really happened and I cannot believe it. I can not believe what really happened. Why did it have to happen that way, why couldn't his fantasy be real? It makes everything so much easier. I have to say of all the stories I have read today, yours is the best by far. I hope to read your...

I liked this but would offer a few suggestions ... "me of evil and devil and fire" I would remove at least one of the "and" "And the bar made of red started to sink", "And there was no time to stop and to think" I think you could remove these "and" overall good work, cant wait to read more of your writtings.

I feel this is a very deep meaning writing. As i could find many meanings each time I read it. I enjoy such writings.

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I really enjoyed this new writting. great work keep it up.