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November 19
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She grabbed the gun and held it to her lover's (or should we say ex-lovers) temple. He began to instantly grovel. "Why are you doing this to me baby?" The sweat ran down his forehead dripping onto his white-tshirt and onto the floor. His snot and tears poured down his face as he begged and prayed she have mercy on him. He wiped away the mess on his face. Drool, perspiration, tears. The gun lay cooly and easily in her hands. She felt the pain in her bruised left cheek less and less as the adre...
Dressed in a tuxedo after the wedding of two of my close friend's wedding (I was a friend to both the bride and groom) and at the reception I began to tell another friend of mine, Jason, how last year I enjoyed waking early and volunteering for the Country Music Marathon. Jason interrupted me before I had started to get into the story. He had heard this all before. "You won't run. The race is only 2 weeks away"! He exclaimed. Annoyed I told him I would certainly run. "Sure you will", he repli...
I thought this was clear and probably needs to be more concise, limit to a page or less (around 300-500 words). One portion I would change slightly: Steve Campbell explains, “Little Woods will provide readers with entertainment, a bit of information about Illinois history, a connection to the transcendence of the prairie, and the message that globalization is real, irreversible, and a test of every individual’s flexibility in adapting to a new reality.” Maybe make it more sensational to grab ...
1: On a scale of 1-10, is it too graphic? Probably a 10, or 1 depending on which end of the scale is too graphic. I think it's too graphic. It is well written and clear to what is going on. Be more descriptive with the setting, the circumstance. Makes this tribe seem like a big sex club. 2: Can the reader follow my descriptions? Feel passion? Any personal response to the writing? I can follow the descriptions. As for the passion, it's mostly lust. I feel like this story is not much more that ...
More of this, put the plot around it and see what happens. It does remind me of a Cary Grant/Hepburn kinda movie. I don't know if the woman drinking would be in line with most of the movies from that era, but it does remind me of the movie "Best Years of Our Lives", the scene where Fred is passed out at the Stephenson's place. Anyway, it's good, just needs more than this scene. I liked the play on words with juniper, witty.