While your only real problem is word choice when it comes to action/description, dialogue really isn't your forte. In the majority of cases, it's not only awkward, but believable. While I could understand a single character talking off if it was part of their development, it makes no sense for every character to speak in that manner. Surely that isn't your type at incorporating what you imagine to be the way Southerners speak, by skipping random words and using slang on others? If so, you're ...

This lacks clarity. It's obvious you're revising six-million words, but what application does that have to your career as a writer? Why such a drastic exaggeration? The strength of the six-word memoirs lie with what can be said with such little...this is simply too vague.

If this wasn't intended to be representative of the writing process; as in you're looking for a way to express yourself, this wasn't a bad attempt. On the other hand, if it wasn't, it lacks clarity, as that was the only thing I could decipher from it.

The contest is for a six-word memoir on your experiences/life as a writer. What does this have to do with that? You told a story in six words, but you failed to express why you told it, as there's nothing to suggest why you felt 'wonderment', 'sadness'. The intent is to express in entirety, not partially. This is partial expression and off-topic.

The only thing this has going for it is pulling off so much repetition in such a small amount of text. While it isn't bad, it is rather mediocre, mate. So you're creative; where's the kick? Kudos for staying on topic and pulling off the device, but I don't see any strengths that will make it stand above the rest of the submissions.

The back log is helpful, obviously, for those that haven't read previous chapters, but what specifically do you want review? Grammar? Plot? Characters? For young adult fantasy, your style is good; simply and easy to follow at a quick pace. Your word is just awkward on occasion. You also have a terrible habit of simply stating things rather than allowing the character's action and the description to tell them. The road seemed unending as Antonia’s energy started to deplete. - You could easily ...

I'd use punctuation, especially when something is this small and it really stands out. State of being without a drug? You're saying you can't write, have no appreciation of art and can't love or aren't loved? Wouldn't the thrill of writing, your love of art, the adoration of others and your empathy for others be as exhilarating as a drug? You're saying the opposite is true.

It's well-written, but certainly nothing within the guidelines for the competition. What does someone watching you dress have to do with your experience as a writer or narrator?

Your first line is one of the best hooks I've seen. 'I spluttered and put my coffee down with a clatter.' Sputtered, not spluttered. Perhaps 'slammed my coffee down' or something similiar opposed to 'coffee down with a clatter'. To me, the way it is now reads awkwardly. The sentence immediately after is pointless detail that contributes nothing to the story. The dialogue is too lengthy, too wordy. All of this serves to destroy the momentum built by your first line. Really, it seems wordy is h...

Poetically written, yes, but ultimately nothing but a beautifully-delivered jumble of ideas loosely connected. The only thing that brings it together at all is the last stanza. You made a good exit. Unfortunately, while you went out with a bang, it was an illusion to hide the fact the rest of the poem is kept together with thin glue and about to break apart any moment. Make your mind up. Either use end line punctuation or don't, but the way you're using sometimes and not others (on majority n...