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Anal spelling editor time: said Dave. “Lets got shoot Lets go shoot. And I'm pretty sure let's has an apostrophe. But I'm too lazy to look it up and make sure. I could be very wrong. All of that aside, I kept expecting Mike to show up and save the day. That says something either about the way you write or the way I read what you write and I'm not sure which. Mostly, I am amused. Yay, humor! :D And I like Dave, even if he has a potty mouth.

Mostly, I think my head just hurts now. A lot like I imagine yours/Curt's does in that conversation. Maybe it'd help if I was gay. Or male. Or both. :) I will admit I now feel compelled to tell my cousin he needs to get a dog. It was funny, but I think maybe I'm not 'getting' it as much as someone involved in the GLBT scene might. Which probably means I'm just the sort of reviewer you aren't interested in, right? I am a little confused how you go from "gay guys have dogs" to "just because he ...

I really liked this look at the memories of someone else. It's definitely a unique take on funerals and death. I was sure the smell you were talking about was going to be formaldehyde or some other preservative chemical (I can still smell it from years after biology class) so it amused me that the scent you associate with death and decay is roses though I can certainly see where you'd get that from. Your talking about running around a funeral as kids reminded me when my great grandmother died...

I first want to thank you for your contributions. :) Thank you for all you've done and all you're going to do. I second want to point out a couple of errors I noticed: "was hard to climb that ladder n social worker without a degree," I think you meant to say "climb that ladder as a social worker...". Or something to that effect. "deploy to assist our citizens our American citizens." I think you just meant to say "our American citizens". :) Also, right about that paragraph, you seem to go from...

This was a very good beginning to a story. I'm definitely intrigued. I see echoes of other stories in it (namely, the strife between the Jedi and the Sith in Star Wars ;) ) but that isn't a bad thing in the least. I've really only got two suggestions: Xa'Kar's litany should probably be separated from the normal run of the text, either through italics or at least quotation marks, even if he's only talking in his head and not out loud. Otherwise, it kind of gets lost in the general run of the w...

One thing that would make this more readable is if you started a new paragraph whenever someone new starts talking. I had a hard time sifting through who was saying what whenever you had dialogue. It would probably also help if instead of saying things like, "I did a spin roll", you actually described what the action looked like which would be easier for me (and/or the average reader) to picture than having to sit there and think, "Okay, what does a spin roll look like?". As I've heard reiter...

First off, you describe Regan in two places as being orange-haired and in another as green-haired. Unless she has magically color changing hair (possible with a fairy!) you might want to decide which you wish her to have. :) I'm not sure how to do it, but it would be nice to have a smoother transition out of Regan's flashback and into the present. Also you use stranger quite a lot in the very first paragraph and it gets kind of redundant, it would probably make things sound better if you didn...

Well, I certainly found myself sniffling. I certainly know what you mean about watching those you care about aging in front of your eyes (though it hasn't hit my parents quite yet) and the problem of Alzheimer's as well so this definitely hit home with me. Whatever happened to the bike?

Hah, your reaction in the poem to the invitation was about my reaction to the title, "why on earth would anyone bring a yak?" and was, of course, what prompted me to click on this poem. Some part of me doesn't care for the suggestion of eating horse (extra crispy or otherwise) but the poem is humorous and whimsical enough that I don't mind overmuch. I liked this and I think I'm going to have to link a few friends over to read it. :)