Nice.

Good writing. Nice royal climates. I don't understand some sentences. (page 2) " Yal crossed his arms, “Are you jealous you’re alone?” " maybe this should be: “Are you jealous? Are you alone?” ...her head rocking slowly back and forth, making sucking mating noises,... How head can make sucking mating noises? Maybe her lips? "“He’s quite beautiful. I can see why you want him for your own.”" 'Beautiful' is rather adjective for describing a woman or a child. Maybe this should be: “He’s quite han...

Good writing. Nice s-f mood. Descriptions are quite precise.

Nice writing. There is some action. Dangerous moments.

Nice work as previous.

This is positive writing. Waiting requires patience, and this is good because life is not a race.

Nice writing. Swift action.

Colorful writing. Nice ancient climate of nature.