I really liked this! The wording and imagery was great and very vivid. The part about wanting to sing and the moon being cordial. Very true when our hearts are heavy and hurting. How the feeling can become so big that we want to do something...anything just simply to let it out. I imagine it more like Nora Jones-ish as far as music goes. Very smokey bluesey and poignant, like most of her work. Very well done!

Even though it is very to the point, as are Haikus, I really related to this one. It's very applicable to my life right now. It says a lot in just 3 lines and the mental image I get is very powerful.

The only complaint I have it that I want to know more. I want more history between the "lovers". What anchors are you freeing her from? How long has it been since she danced? I completely get the theme of regaining someone's trust after they have been hurt - thus the reference of anchors, wings, black ivy coils (great imagery, by the way) but does she have a halo to burn? Because she doesn't trust doesn't make her innocent, only guarded...or maybe it does in Interval's world... :)

I admit it's a little quirky and I had to read it a couple of times. I get the point you are trying to make to the reader: singly, we have the potential to make a huge impact. As part of a crowd, not so much. Haikus are difficult to write though, even though they are short. Making a profound point in 3 lines takes time and patience. The point comes through. I think with a little tweaking in the wording it might flow better.

Fun one! I liked it and it made me smile. Makes me think of young love; infatuation. Fun, new and happy. Which combined with the word toy and the image of the popsicle, makes me think of a child who is also happy, fun and new. Very good. :)

I saw the age of the writer and was prepared to hate everything I read. I was prepared for it to sound immature and have bad english. Instead, it was written well over all. The story is a good one and I certainly believe a lot of teenagers in America can relate to it. However, I was disappointed in the language. I know because of the type of story and setting, the language is necessary to make the characters believable, but it left me with a bad taste in my mouth. Otherwise, good job.

Over all, I like it. It flows well. There are a lot of words that provoke a couple whose lives are like any average couple. What I want to know is what makes this couple different...what makes their love so special that a poem is written about them? The beginning was great and the verse that said "I forget how I Cursed when I made it," made me smile when I read it. Then it all of a sudden jumped to the husband working on his truck. I didn't understand why it was there. What was the point of t...

I'm wondering who died - the grandson or someone else? If it's someone else, which I imagine it is (b/c she says "when I was twenty"), then tell us more about that person. I do like the relationship between the boat, the oars, the water and the grandson. Good imagery with the words and I really got a good picture in my mind from the part about the water's resistance against the boat. I just want to know more about the person she misses. Is it a husband, lover, son, daughter, friend? Someone t...

What a beautiful picture you painted of a remarkable woman! Like most remarkable women though, they have a weakness that leads to their downfall and in her case, it was death. That is very sad but what great memories she leaves her grandaughter after she is gone. The part about scattering her ashes and feeling them fall on her fingertips and lips just struck me in a way I've never concidered before. That is a person and parts of her, part of her "life" is that close. Great thought! Good job o...

The only thing I didn't really "like" about this one was the last stanza. The verse is different that the rest and it just changes the flow of it and makes it awkward. If it's supposed to be more of a song, that would make sense. I love the whole piece and the way I can see the 2 friends laughing and remembering times they haven't thought about in ages. Great stuff!