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AGE: 26
LOC: Sweden
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 04

Why make anything simple and effecient, when a way can be found to make it complex and wonderful?

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Version 1
7 Reviews   2 Comments
Dear Ms. Einstein –   The Midnight Mourner is a Christmas ghost story, revolving around the strange occurrences observed and lived through by three young children in their townhouse in early 17th century London.   It all begins on the first of December, when the family moves into the newly built house on Fitzroy Square, unaware that their lives are about to change forever. Jacob, ten; Jennifer, eight, and Huckleberry, four, soon find themselves beginning to believe – mor...
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Screenplay / Scarecrow
Version 1
8 Reviews   6 Comments
SCARECROW By Annie 2007-12-25 EXT. PUMPKIN PATCH - NIGHT The pumpkins’ fiery color is hidden by the blue light of a nearly full moon. All is still and quiet in the patch. A field mouse slinks between the thick vines connecting the pumpkins, disappearing out of sight as swiftly as it appeared. The patch is large, surrounded by a very old, very rickety wooden fence. Beyond it stretches a view of freshly turned fields, their earth dark against the deep blue horizon. In the middle of the pumpkin ...
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Screenplay / Barabac
Version 3
11 Reviews   11 Comments
BARABAC 2007-08-21 Second Draft By Annie Open with black screen. BARABAC (V.O.) It’s easy to pull the trigger. It’s easy to take a life. It’s protecting life that’s a bitch. Some people seem meant for disaster. INT. WAREHOUSE - NIGHT It’s dark. It’s vast, but almost empty. A few cars stand scattered around the space. JAMES BARABAC (42), lean, but tough, wearing a nice suit and loosened tie, has dark hair, blue eyes, a handsome face. He is ducking behind one of the abandoned vehicles. TESS (28...
Screenplay / Barabac
Version 2
0 Reviews   0 Comments
BARABAC 2007-08-21 Second Draft By Annie Open with black screen. BARABAC (V.O.) It’s easy to pull the trigger. It’s easy to take a life. It’s protecting life that’s a bitch. Some people seem meant for disaster. INT. WAREHOUSE - NIGHT It’s dark. It’s vast, but almost empty. A few cars stand scattered around the space. JAMES BARABAC (42), lean, but tough, wearing a nice suit and loosened tie, has dark hair, blue eyes, a handsome face. He is ducking behind one of the abandoned vehicles. TESS (28...
Screenplay / Barabac
Version 1
10 Reviews   7 Comments
BARABAC 2007-07-02 By Annie INT. DINER - DAY It’s your typical Route 66 inspired hang-out, filled to the brim with slogan T-shirt wearing, cap wielding truck drivers. Three of these are MARTIN (42), GREGORY (36) and KEN (49). They are sitting in a booth by one of the large windows overlooking the vast parking lot, hosting a number of impressive vehicles. The three men are having a friendly argument, one that seems to be familiar to all of them. MARTIN You know you’re never going to win. Never...
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / The Palmetto Connection
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Father Why Haste Thou?
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Self Pleasures...
Hi there! I like the name Baby Doll Killer - inventive, a little haunting, and yet with a touch of humor to it. Sounds like someone whacking people up in Silicon Valley. ;) I thought your narrative flowed well enough, but there were a few places where a spell check, and especially a punctuation check, would breath even more life into the text. "I looked at him like he was an idiot then told him it felt good" - I would make it: "I looked at him like he was an idiot, then told him it felt good....
Hi there! I loved this piece! At first I wasn't too sure about spelling out the southern accent, but since you didn't do it through the whole text, but mostly simply used the sentence structures to give it the right feel, it stopped bothering me and I got into the text with ease. I liked the narrating voice, it worked well with someone observing the spectacle. I loved the mom's behavior just going completely against what the Christian faith is all about - or should be all about, anyway. And l...
Hi there - let me begin by saying that I think you're very talented and that you've managed to create a world that I wouldn't mind exploring further. I think you're characters and their abilities are very intriguing and you've built your dialogue in a very nice, fluent way. You also have some awesome visuals in there, it seems like a compelling world to be in. I love science fiction, and especially that which ties back to old fables, legends or history - and you've done it in a very nice way....
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