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AGE: 22
LOC: Coventry, RI
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 31

I’ve been writing since I first learned how to hold a pencil, and I think it’ll be that way until I die. I think the world is an intensely beautiful and tragic place, and I want to do whatever I can do tell a good story about this crazy life.

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Short Story / Bats
Version 1
8 Reviews   2 Comments
Sometimes against the darkness all you need is the sight of some wings to make you feel at ease. At least that was the case as I drove down the wooded road that night, the only illumination coming from the moon and some sporadically placed street lights. I had no idea where I was, but I knew to keep driving on that road until I saw an old farmhouse, and from there I was to take a left down another wooded road and drive for about half a mile. Maybe a little more. His directions were, as alway...
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Poetry / Demons
Version 1
1 Review   0 Comments
Demons Can press their palms Against my heart if they want to, But There is blood under my skin That carries something stronger As It rushes about, swirling And crashing like fierce ocean tides. I Know that the things I fear Are the things I can reduce to words, To Small marks on a piece of paper, To breathy utterances I whisper at night. But If I never worry about slipping I will never learn to watch my steps, or Worse, I will never let myself shrug off the Doubt that wraps itself around my ...
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Poetry / The Mermaid Foam
Version 1
2 Reviews   0 Comments
Under the cover of the wave, the world is opaque. The azure ceiling veiled in white lather Reflects with an iridescent shimmer, And everything becomes silent. The quiet becomes a thick pressure Against my ears, a booming calm. My body rushes down, sucked to the floor And I swear I can feel every molecule of water Sparking with the electricity of life. Once, I was told, “The white foam is dead mermaids.” And I dreamed for weeks Of beautiful women with fins, green and blue Scales like small mas...
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Short Story / Bats
Version 2
7 Reviews   4 Comments
Sometimes against the darkness all you need is the sight of some wings to make you feel at ease. At least that was the case as I drove down the wooded road that night, the only illumination coming from the moon and some sporadically placed street lights. I had no idea where I was, but I knew to keep driving on that road until I saw an old farmhouse, and from there I was to take a left down another wooded road and drive for about half a mile. Maybe a little more. His directions were, as alway...
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Poetry / Black and White
Version 1
1 Review   1 Comment
With a little whisper of breath she said, Nothing is black and white except for black and white themselves, As though she knew for sure that this was so. My neck prickled when she said this, Thousands of hairs stood like blades of grass grown tall, Because of the intensity behind her eyes. I could see a hurricane brewing off the coast, Behind the bluffs of her eyelids And under the clouds of her lashes, And I wanted to tell her that it’s ok to believe that Sometimes the world is really black ...
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Poetry / Enslaved
I think that within this poem there is quite a bit of good diction, but I think it could possibly be better. I don't know the exact situation that the poem is talking about, but I can tell that it's probably a very powerful one. I sort of get that feeling, but not entirely. I would love to see this poem's electricity turned up a notch. For example (and this is just an example, don't feel like I'm trying to change your voice or anything) in your first line you say "I can still see blood everyw...
Yes, I am annoyed by this reviewer, too. After he left me an awkward and REALLY unhelpful reviewer, I sent him a message asking if he would be willing to rewrite his review in a way that would be more beneficial to me. He never responded. I don't feel it's fair that he gets credits for having a certain number of words in his reviews when those reviews make absolutely no sense.
Short Story / Eidolon Amour
This little piece is packed with some great details and images, but I feel like it's missing something. I really like your first line-- it's simple, yet there's something profound about it. I think a lot of really good pieces of literature begin with statements of this same fashion. I guess my confusion with this piece comes from not knowing really anything about the situation or who these two individuals are. There's no reason you can't keep it very short yet explain everything; I'm by no me...
50.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
Short Story / Escape
I'm going to review as I go along so bear with me! I absolutely love this line in the beginning: The fan above me wasn’t moving air, just using electricity trying to create the illusion of coolness. It made exactly 38 rotations every minute. It really sets the scene for the reader. I can feel the laboriousness of the situation, the slowness of it. I also really like how you make it clear that the mother resents the daughter for something she cannot control-- her own existence. Perhaps that wi...
Short Story / Atomic Love
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