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AGE: 20
LOC: Myrtle Beach, SC
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 24

“We all have the potential to fall in love a thousand times in our lifetime. It’s easy. The first girl I ever loved was someone I knew in sixth grade. Her name was Missy; we talked about horses. The last girl I love will be someone I haven’t even met yet, probably. They all count. But there are certain people you love who do something else; they define how you classify what love is supposed to feel like. These are the most important people in your life, and you’ll meet maybe four or five of these people over the span of 80 years. But there’s still one more tier to all this; there is always one person you love who becomes that definition. It usually happens retrospectively, but it happens eventually. This is the person who unknowingly set…

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Lyrics / Spin
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You will pitch one left to the undertones that undulate the Meaning to smoke Cinders that spin They lure you They trick you Into believing they were wrong again Sing past, look past As it would appear, they never knew you quite so well Or perhaps you changed Settle, settle But not without stirring the pot Pot, what pot luck you've got I said, Boy, spin for me Gyre out (or into me) Spin, spin  
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Poetry / Scratch my bones
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Scratch my bones Scrape scrape Notice your body float into the pitter-pat A fiend, a fiend Eat your sorrow twice a week Sit with Pity and watch the Farces float Float from the trees Float from the trees Like the tree ghosts Inspired by dreams of blue and white lampshades Dancing dull out of reach from those perfect arms and thighs I'd like to touch sometimes Touch like a cat's claw razoring the tree and peeling away specks of the scratches of the roughened and lonely wood creature you ha...
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Short Story / Jonas and the Bluejay
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Jonas and the Bluejay This is an original fictionalized short story I've been working on the past two days. Don't mind the grammatical errors, because I suck with commas and semicolons and all that other shit. I It was inevitable that you would leave someday. We both knew this. Maybe it was because we never spoke about it. It was one of those things that was understood, yet no one suffered unbearable affliction from the topic laying dormant in the day-to-day. We would try to lie, out of nece...
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I'll never forget the day You said death was our only escape from all of this I drew your portrait once With graphite lines of optimism Filled with your internal pessimism You said I had never drawn before so accurately The shade from your mouth smudged my fingertips You moved impatiently with each contour Sometimes the lines found each other by accident It was as if I had no hand in it No hand in it No hand
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I know that affection is cheap when you're with me. And salvation is only a hand clasp away. But in the swing of your thoughts, and the bounce of my impulsiveness, we've got something really great, kid. Label it escapism, liberalism, selfishness, I don't care. But the synopsis of a person hurts so much more when I twirl my fingers through your hair. I don't know what's more heart breaking-- anticipation of the end, or acception of deprevation. Of loss and need... Your concern without meaning....
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Poetry / Untitled
Great form with the repetition of the last one-word line from each stanza--this really halps to emphasis that particular emotion/though
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Short Story / Cosmic Stoner Pt. 3
I'm interested to see where this will continue to go. Subject material is also intriguing and I don't think many people have the guts to write about something such as this. Excellent characterization, too! Double check some of your mechanical errors like punctuation and omitted things...but i think this is a great story!!
Short Story / Blood and Gunsmoke
I think you did an excellent job with the dialouge and environmental descriptions. I would caution you to check for a few spelling errors like "the men fell to there knees." I thought you did a good job with the ending because it adds that universal touch that a lot of short stories lack.
Poetry / Congratulations!
Part one is my favorite! Part two introduces ideas about the speaker...and then part three jumps from the monotony of fabric colors to death. I love it though...I'm sure some people would say that its not a tight enough structure but I think thats the poem's strongest element.