I enjoyed what you wrote very much. It reminded me of my own Grandmother and the good times we shared. Looking back, it was a magical time for me. This brings me to your sentence: "Mixing worlds With the stroke of a brush". To stay in contex with baking perhaps a change of discriptive words should occure, eg: "Mixing worlds With a magic spoon". or something to that effect. Talent? For 14 years old you write better than many adults. By all means keep developing your writing. One thing I do whe...

Nice job. I wish I could go back too. You have aquired good rhythem, reader interest. I feel you are writing abouve that of your age. Just a little inside info for you, Nothing has to be perfict, just apear to be perfict. How do we do that? By making something out of our imperfections or failings.

Sad story. Talent worth shaping. Absolutely. Poetry overal. Good story line. Nice punch at the end. Over story line was done well leading the reader in and identifying with your story line and leaving the punch of it for last. Style. I felt I was reading a story insted of a poem because of to many words being used to discribe it. eg: "My brother and I come home from school, Open the front door and “R-E-S-P-E-C-T!” It could read: Home from school Brother and I Open the door To R-E-S-P-E-C-T Tr...

Such a dark poem for someone so young. Poetry - Overall. This poem was well written. Has a compelling alure to finish it in hopes there would be a change of vision. To Be Understood.... I understood it all too well. I'm sorry but, suicide is not an answere, it's an end of life worth salvaging.

I like this one. shows humor. Nice job.

You were correct...it is a dark poem regarding self infliction. Well written. Maybe a few word changes. eg:"As the blade tears the flesh apart", Unless you are using a dull knife or razor I think it would be more accurate to possibaly say something like this:"As the blade slices the flesh apart,"... Just a thought. I found that the impact of this poem an attention getter in a strainge sort of way.Keep on writting...you show much talent. Thank for sharing.

Nice poem and advice. I only had a problem with the word "insignificant". It seems to long of a word here. Perhaps using one with less syllables would work better. e.g. "Little". Also the word "intrinsic" could be simplified with "essential. Overall I enjoyed the read. Keep writing.

Sad story, simplistic, none of which is a terrable thing. Your poem was interesting and to the point and written with emotion.In the line "Is it that hard to see your on baby?" Is the word "on" a typo for own? Thank you for sharing.

I really enjoyed this one...nice work. One question, in the line "that been gone" should "that" be "that's or that is"? The opener is fantastic "his words are like tiny fingers touching me inside out " very pictorial.

While reading this you got me laughing several times. We all know people that are so far beyond burn out and we have a tendency to avoid them if we can.I'm taking the following as a typo:"Exhaust of you Feeble Intelligence." probably should read:"Exhaust of your Feeble Intelligence." You set up a character with vivid imagery for us to see. You expressed dislike or anoyance phrases with flawless passion to utterly distroy the intended person. Phrases such as: "Spare me from the Ridiculous, Abs...