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LAST LOGIN: September 20
LAST LOGIN: September 20
I work in the television industry but prefer fiction.
I’m a writer/poet/wannabe photographer.
I author a website of daily rants and ruminations named: artofstarving.com
What’s there to say, I like telling stories.
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The entire house held a fragrant surprise for her when she returned home from the lab one evening. Walking through the doorway she immediately knew that Jonah had been out in the garden cutting flowers. She could smell the earth in the house and the receptors in her nose recognized the scents of azalea and begonia, and this was half the pleasing allure, she knew -- the familiarity. She dropped her keys and her purse on the small glass table in the alcove, next to a fresh white orchid, its lea...
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Life looks aflame from afar, but close up it's just fireflies in a jar.
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A glorious red hawk swooped over our heads clutching a wiggling squirrel in its talons. It landed in a nearby tree and dropped its prey on the hard forest floor. Sat in the tree staring at it. We hiked back to our camp and started a fire, placing a percolator on the grill. I looked up at the clouds, sizing them for rain. “I think it’s safe to cook,” I told him. Packer opened the trunk and sorted through the icebox, emerging with a half carton of eggs, a slab of butter, and a package of sausag...
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The explosion occurred a little before five o’clock and was heard as far away as Bergoo. The first responder was Mary Kate who lives in a rickety room above her filling station, right outside the entrance of the mine. Mary Kate, who tops three hundred pounds, is surprisingly agile and arrived while the ground was still shaking and black coalsmoke was pouring out the entrance thick and suffocating. She went running in without taking a second to consider the darkness she was entering. Her man w...
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I sit at my player piano watching the keys fall one by one. Ghost fingers playing a grim tune. It follows me into the kitchen. I open the refrigerator door. The light comes on over a barren scene. An old can of beans. A rotten quart of milk. Snow piles up against the garage. The car won’t start. She left two months ago. My heart won’t start, until she returns The mailman in his parka face says there’s not a letter for me. The Wooden Indian dances when we’re not looking. The woman at the end o...
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Great title and use of the phrase within the poem. Liked your prose and style, the first line set up the scene with gusto. Other great lines: well-mannered pain, my god is fighting your friend tonight, dull blue of the moon. There were some bits where I felt you went a little too far, like "as she doesn’t see my pain" kind of takes away the bite of the preceding line for me. And I'm not sure what the lying friend who trollies it's way into your stomach is? Not that I necessarily need to know,...
I'm really conflicted about your piece and feel like I could go on and on. There was much I admired. The tone. The battle with the roach. Jack. But there was a lot of awkward sentences that I felt could be cleaned up, confusing tense changes, and at the end, I'm not quite sure what I'm supposed to get out of this piece. I know you mentioned that as well, so maybe jumping over to fiction would allow you to give the relationship a story too. You mention the cat being gone two months later but n...
Effective rant against the stupidity of war. Poetry as protest. I liked the way you linked Dresden and Iraq and all the great, raw images you used along the way. The chant-like stanzas reminded me of boot camp limericks. My only hangup was Civilisation pissing on the poetic phrase. I don't know, seems to sell a great poem short. The tragedy is that war doesn't piss on artists, it destroys them, demolishes them... war, unfortunately, is a much greater force than art. That's just my own dark da...
First attempt at reviewing haiku so please bare with me. The middle line seems to let the other two down. I'm not sure what that means because you would only take prisoners, not corpses, in a war. It's probably just me. I think the middle line should be where the action happens, some message, something to connect casualities of wars and the walking wounded. I think a more specific image or detail, without being explanatory, could help this haiku have more of an effect. Something about the pri...
Good twist. I was wondering if there was going to be anything to this besides some erotic description and then bam! Clever, had me fooled. I'd think about giving her sickness a specific cause though. Pregnant? Or something more comical, chicken pox? Also, experiment with the formatting. Not suggesting turing it into a poem, but perhaps work with ellipses and paragraph breaks for more effect. This is my first flash fiction review and I'm glad I started with this one. Cheers.
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